Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now a days, in many societies obesity is regarded as a major problem.

Most of the people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem most of the people eat junk food and they have to face the problem obesity. but on the other hand side many people feel that the junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity

i think that junk food is major cause of obesity because now a days there is no good junk food most5 of the people open am restrurent of junk food and there all food products are not good they use bad oil and food items in making of junk food

many people eat the junk food from the street food and open hotels etc

but i think so that the low standrad junk food should be banned .

people should have to eat a fresh junk food reather then the bad food which they find on the streets

most of the people go to good restrurent for eating junk food where the enviroment is very good and clean .whenever people have to eat bad food which made in dirty oil then they have to face obesity

Obesity is such a problem in which the person have to suffer from many medical issues

now a days many people are facing the obesity

in this they have to face many major problems most of the people are just on bed just because of obesity

they are not able to walk or run

in my opinion i think soo that junk food should not be banned but the bad food which is present on the streets and made in bad oil should be banned

The government should have to make a good enviroment and have to make the restrurent clean

where the junk food is eat able and tasty

people should avoid to eat bad junk food but they have to search a good place to eat junk food

people should also have to avoid eating to much junk food they just have to eat junk food just once in a week

they will never have to make junk food as habbit

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear personal view near the end: “junk food should not be banned,” while arguing that unsafe street food should be restricted. However, the response does not adequately discuss both views in the question. The argument that advertising contributes to obesity is asserted rather than explained, and the opposing view—that advertising does not contribute and should not be banned—is not developed. Much of the essay shifts to food hygiene, dirty oil, and restaurant cleanliness, which are related to food safety but do not directly answer the advertising debate. The health effects of obesity are relevant, but the claim that people are “just on bed” is not supported with a clear example or explanation. Develop each side of the advertising issue and connect your opinion directly to it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence from the issue, through your opinion, to suggestions for government and individuals. Some linking expressions, such as “but on the other hand” and “in my opinion,” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the discussion moves abruptly from advertising to street food, medical problems, restaurant cleanliness, and eating habits. Repeated openings such as “most of the people” and “now a days” make progression difficult to follow. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, while short lines such as “they are not able to walk or run” are not connected to the surrounding explanation. Group the two views and your opinion into separate paragraphs, and use links that show the relationship between each claim and its support.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “obesity,” “junk food,” “medical issues,” and “government,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, especially “junk food,” “bad food,” and “most of the people.” Some expressions are unclear or imprecise, such as “fresh junk food,” “low standrad junk food,” and “the environment is very good and clean” when the main issue is advertising. Spelling errors, including “restrurent,” “enviroment,” “reather,” and “habbit,” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range for discussing advertising and its effects, and check spelling and collocations. For example, distinguish food quality from advertising influence rather than using “bad food” for both.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts, for example with “because” and “but,” and some simple statements communicate your meaning. However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors occur frequently across the response. Examples include “most of the people eat junk food and they have to face the problem obesity,” where the relationship between ideas and the noun phrase are not controlled, and “the person have to suffer,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. Articles and verb forms are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “the food which made in dirty oil.” Run-on sentences and inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation make boundaries between ideas unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses; check agreement, articles, and sentence punctuation during revision.

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