Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an ongoing Discussion across the scoities, related to fatness which considered a huge health issue. Some individuals consider that fast food advertsiements is a significant factor for this issue and must be banned. While others beleive that junk food advertisement does not the main reason for heaviness therefore must not be banned. Both views are consist of valid reasons, in this essay I will explain each argument and give my personal approach as well about the concern challenge.

On the one hand, a siginifcant number of fast food companies use various tricks for public attraction, therefore they inevest a huge amount of money on their advertisements. In many cases they hired influencial personalities Such as Actors, Politicans, and social workers or media inlfuencers for their publicity. For instance, when a renowned person share his comment about their food company like "Panda Food company" then definitely public will try to taste the food. As result the majority of population is adicted by junk food and they are facing a number health issues especially stomach problems. In fact, in this circumtances overadvertisement of detrimental food must be completely prohibit.

On the other hand, there are a number of high quality food brands in almost any country across the world, where they offer healthy items for their customer and a number of people go there for eating and drinking. Although they spend large amount in their publicity also call for riviews by their clients. So in my opinion people must be aware of fake and fradulant advertisement because they can suffer in any dangerous disease because of low quality food, the publicity of junk food is the basic ritght of any company or resturant or fast food hotel. For example, the people of urban areas in pakistan almost eat junk foods at KFC and they are still healthy.

In conclusion, advertisement is play a key role in business dvelopment and also the basic need of any individual to campaign for his project therefore its must be open, whereas some unhygenic fast food companies publicity should be completely stop.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the debate and state a position: advertising can be a legitimate business activity, but publicity for unhygienic or harmful food should be stopped. The examples of celebrity endorsements and fast-food consumption in Pakistan are relevant, and the response stays focused on obesity and advertising. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The first side links advertising to increased consumption and health problems, but does not explain clearly how this leads specifically to obesity. The opposing view shifts toward healthy food brands and food quality rather than directly showing why advertising does not contribute to obesity. Your position also becomes difficult to interpret because you support open advertising while calling for some advertising to be stopped. Clarify the distinction and support each view more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting opposing views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the intended progression. Within paragraphs, however, some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Although they spend large amount in their publicity also call for reviews” does not clearly connect the ideas, and “So in my opinion” introduces a position that is not fully reconciled with the preceding point. The conclusion repeats the idea that advertising should remain open but then calls for some companies’ publicity to stop. Use clearer references and transitions to show how each point supports your argument, and ensure the conclusion follows consistently from the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “influential personalities,” “publicity,” “detrimental food,” and “health issues,” and you use some less common expressions to discuss advertising and consumer behaviour. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “food,” “people,” and “advertisement,” while several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning less clear. For instance, “fatness” is not a natural term for the public-health issue, “public attraction” is awkward, and “basic right” does not clearly express your intended point about companies advertising. Spelling errors such as “scoities,” “adicted,” and “fradulant” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations so your ideas are easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “While,” “Although,” and “because,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. Examples include “fast food advertisements is,” “Both views are consist,” and “advertisement is play a key role.” The sentence beginning “Although they spend large amount…” is also incomplete or poorly connected to the following clause. Some sentences run together, particularly in the introduction and conclusion. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and complete clauses first, then combine them with conjunctions. Careful proofreading for punctuation and sentence boundaries would improve control.

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