Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the communites considered the fast food as the majoe cause of obesity among people , so they think that solution to check this is to levy restrictions of publicity of fast food, whereas, the other majority thinks that social media does contrubute fast food rapid consumption, therefore should not be banned.The first paragraph will discuss tne role of advertisement in ecouraging fast food by promoting promational packages and deal and prowaking fake pulicity of nutrient value of junk food, on the contary second paragrapgh throw lights on useful imapct of leving resticyion on publicity of fast food by promoting nutritional seminar and debates and ecouraging home made food to avoid obesity with my opinion in favour of implication of regulation on social media about promtion of fast food.

Now a days, social media is part and parcel of everyone life, so more and more publicity of promational packages and attractive offer motivate the buyer to use junk food that is misture of artificial ingrdients and some preserved sauces that are not benefical for health.For example, a teenager will prefer pitza instead of eating fresh fruits. Simlarly, fake advertisement about unhealthy ingrdients and presetive make decieve most of people by ecouraging them to eat fast food insead of organic food.For example, most of the students eat burgers and noodles instead of organic lunch of vegetables and wheat flour. In this way, promotion of junk food is main cuase of obesity among people.

Banning the advertisement of fast food will check the trend of eating fast ffd, rather much seminatr and debated should be held in promotion of organic food. the use of balance diet consists of fruits, vegetabes and meat that all are fresh. For example, homemade juice with fresh fruits has more nutritional value than drinkin juice with preservator.Banning the promootion of fast food will decearse the unhealthy trend of frquent use of junk food and promote healthy eating habit among people that will lead to helathy and active life of all.

In conclusion use of junk food is mainly promoted by advertisement, so imposing restriction will not only ban this unhealthy and fake eatin habits but also promote use of ornaic and homemade food that leave long lasting imapcts on lifeof peole away from obesity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position in favour of restricting junk-food advertising, and you give relevant reasons, including promotional offers, misleading claims about nutritional value, and the appeal of fast food to teenagers. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the opposing view is not meaningfully explained: the opening mentions that some people think advertising should not be banned, but the essay does not develop their reasons. Your own case is also asserted more than fully supported; for instance, the examples of pizza and burgers illustrate food choices but do not establish how advertising causes obesity. Develop the counterargument and explain the links between advertising, eating habits, and obesity more carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group related points. However, progression is difficult to follow because the introduction is an unusually long sentence that previews ideas unclearly, and the first body paragraph combines several claims without a clear sequence. Connectors such as “whereas,” “therefore,” and “In this way” are sometimes used inaccurately or do not clearly show how one idea follows another. The second body paragraph also shifts from banning advertising to seminars and healthy food without explaining the relationship between these proposals. Use shorter, focused paragraphs, with one main point developed at a time and clear links between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “promotional packages,” “nutritional value,” “preserved,” and “balanced diet.” However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the argument difficult to understand, such as “majoe,” “contrubute,” “prowaking,” and “presetive.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “publicity of fast food” and “fake advertisement about unhealthy ingredients.” Choose more precise, natural expressions such as “advertising for fast food” and “misleading claims about nutritional content.” Proofread carefully, as repeated errors distract the reader and sometimes obscure your intended meaning. Building a reliable set of topic-specific collocations would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express complex relationships using clauses with “whereas,” “so,” and “that,” and you include examples to support your points. However, complex sentences are often faulty or overloaded, as in the opening, where several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries. There are frequent problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction: “the fast food” and “everyone life” need different article or possessive forms, while “seminar and debates should be held” has inconsistent number. Punctuation is also unreliable, particularly around long sentences and after full stops. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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