Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the given question there is a discussion on obesity. Some people are arguing junk food advertisements are the main reason and it must be band. And other people are talking that junk food advertising is not a problem for obesity and it should not band. We will discuss on both of point of view.

On the one hand, there are the big arguments on junk food advertisement because of obesity. People think it is not necessary to band advertisement because of obesity. Because there are many few people suffering through obesity and for them all the advertisement and business get stope it is not good for our country. Some people still arguing that advertising of junk food is the major reason of obesity and it should band form television, newspaper and also from holdings.

Now a days fast food is very big business in every country. Many peoples are in food industries and all the restaurant, street food and fine dine. Every one are giving advertisement and making holdings to promote there business and make them more popular but people think all this stuff is the major reason of obesity and they should stop giving advertisement.

However, some people are saying that fast food advertisement is not there the reason for obesity. In the medical research doctor have proved obesity is hereditary problem and there is no connection between fast food. For example; My friend have same problem of obesity and he also thinks that it is all because of junk food and its advertisement. but he was wrong and his whole family is suffering with same problem of obesity.

Now a day people are gym freak and all people suffering form obesity has started going gym and make there body fit and fine. This is the best solution to free form obesity without any side effect.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on junk food advertising and obesity. However, the development of ideas is limited and sometimes contradictory. For instance, the second paragraph attempts to argue against banning advertisements but does so in a confusing way, and the third paragraph repeats the idea of banning without adding depth. The student's own opinion is not clearly stated or integrated into the structure, making the overall position difficult to follow. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed argument supported by clear evidence rather than anecdotal or repetitive statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is weak. Transitions are often missing or misused, such as the abrupt shift between the discussion of advertising and the mention of medical research. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, which disrupts the flow of the argument. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly improve the coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'big', 'problem', and 'good'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'band' instead of 'banned', 'holdings' instead of 'billboards', and 'stope' instead of 'stopped'. These errors occasionally impede communication. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to health and advertising, and work on using more precise vocabulary to express complex ideas rather than relying on simple, high-frequency words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often grammatically incorrect, such as 'Some people are arguing junk food advertisements are the main reason and it must be band.' There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('Every one are giving'), article usage, and verb tense consistency. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and full stops. To improve, the student needs to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing the frequency of errors that interfere with the clarity of the message.

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