Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I agree that it is absolutely true, that the fat is the major problem in todays youngsters and many people blame that advertisements is the major issue and this needs to be stopped.

The primary reason of this statement is the youngsters are highly influenced by the social media .They watch this on online platforms and start eating the same thing and this will cause problems to them in the future .example- they watch the adds on the you tube about some kind of food they start eating the same. The second reason is they think that everyone is eating how it will be harmful to the body example-start watching others make them feel hungry.

Neverthesles, some people think that this needs to be banned or some not because children feels craving after watch this .Morever we need to make them understand that this is harmful for them and cause problems in the future. If we think banning these adds is he solution then it is not .This may be lose to the campany. These adds need not to be banned because this may loss many people along with the company .

In the conclusion ,problems of obesity is due to eating alot junk food and not doing exercise to make body fit. Banning is not the solution at all Make your children understand what is beneficial for heir health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, which is a requirement of the task. However, the ideas are under-developed and lack sufficient supporting evidence or depth. The explanation regarding why advertisements influence youngsters is repetitive and simplistic. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the ability to fully develop the arguments as required by the band descriptors. To improve, you should expand on your points with specific examples or logical reasoning rather than repeating the same ideas in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'The primary reason', 'The second reason', 'Neverthesles', 'Morever'). The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the logical progression is hindered by the lack of clear, sophisticated linking words. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the flow of the argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help create a more natural and coherent flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'major problem', 'eating the same thing', and 'make body fit' are somewhat simplistic for an academic essay. There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'adds' (instead of 'ads' or 'advertisements'), 'Neverthesles', 'campany', and 'heir'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more academic vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'the fat is the major problem', 'advertisements is the major issue', 'children feels craving', and 'this may loss many people'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper structure or clarity. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence variety will be beneficial.

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