Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years most of people are eating outside foods it's causing obesity problem they are facing,some people argue banned outside food of health.but other side people argue try new cuisine it's like a advertising.in my view of both sies as some particular thing as they are.

On one of hand , eating outside food causing obesity most of people are facing, when people are eating outside food for example you take a small shop they are used expiry products they are repeat oil it is case of odd diseases happen so that's why most of the people are affected unhealthy their lifestyle so maybe avoiding the outside food they are energy as well as.

On other of hand , try to new cuisine is advertising some people they are interesting new food tasting and they are mostly love the food try to new cuisines most of the people nowadays they are not time to cook they self so that's why most of the people prefer to eat outside food they say like that this is the they are choice they try to new cuisine like new things are something says but it would be sometimes some healthy foods are better to the outside and oily foods . Some most of the people outside they like try to new cuisines.

In conclusion, eating outside food causing a obesity so some people are you they are banned some people are argue they did not banned to so I think like that eat healthy and protect our health as well as.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on junk food advertising and obesity. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. The arguments regarding 'outside food' and 'new cuisine' are repetitive and lack specific evidence or logical depth. The student's own opinion is mentioned in the introduction and conclusion but is not clearly articulated or supported throughout the body paragraphs. The response struggles to maintain a consistent focus on the specific issue of 'advertising' as requested by the prompt, instead focusing broadly on the act of eating out. To improve, the student should ensure each paragraph directly addresses the prompt's specific question and provides clear, logical support for their position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While there are attempts to use cohesive devices like 'On one of hand' and 'In conclusion', these are often used incorrectly or sound unnatural. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences do not link logically to one another. The referencing is often unclear, making it hard for the reader to identify the subject of the sentences. To improve, the student should focus on using transition words more accurately and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words like 'food', 'people', and 'eating'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'outside foods' instead of 'fast food' or 'dining out', and 'they are repeat oil' instead of 'reused oil'. The student struggles to express complex ideas due to this restricted range. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their vocabulary to include more precise terms related to health, marketing, and lifestyle, and practice using these words in correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and article usage (e.g., 'most of people are eating', 'they are not time to cook they self'). The essay relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, the student must focus on the basics of English sentence construction, particularly the correct use of verbs and pronouns, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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