Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is undeniable that the junk food advertising has now become more pensive problem. In this regard many people claiming that it is harmful while other rejected this notion. This essay will outline the former view of this notion in favoring of negative impacts of this trend will be outline in forthcoming fragments with its logical conclusion.
To commence with, firstly some people believe that junk food ads should be banned. To explain it because they contribute to obesity because viewers are easily drawn to them. It is
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, containing only 88 words. Because the essay is incomplete, it fails to address the prompt fully. The introduction attempts to outline the essay's structure, but the body paragraph is cut off mid-sentence, preventing the development of any arguments or the presentation of a clear personal opinion. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, and the position is not developed. To improve, you must ensure you complete the full essay structure, including a balanced discussion of both views and a clear conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, such as using 'To commence with' to start the first body paragraph. However, the text is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the abrupt ending makes it impossible to assess the overall flow or the use of referencing. To achieve a higher score, you need to write full paragraphs that connect ideas logically using a variety of linking words and ensure the essay reaches a coherent conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. For example, 'pensive problem' is an incorrect usage; 'pensive' means thoughtful, whereas you likely meant 'pervasive' or 'pressing'. Additionally, 'in favoring of' is grammatically awkward. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a basic meaning, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You should focus on learning collocations and using more academic vocabulary to express your ideas clearly and accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. Phrases like 'many people claiming that' (should be 'many people claim') and 'other rejected this notion' (should be 'others reject') show issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. The sentence structure is quite simple, and the incomplete nature of the text prevents the demonstration of a wide range of complex structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms and consistent tense usage throughout your writing.
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