Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Task => 2

In this contemporary era, advertisements play a vitul role for the sucess of any product. It is often argued that advertisements of junk food mainly cause obesity and need to banned. Whereas, other considers that advertisements of food does not the main problem of obesity and should be. This essay will discuss both the perspective before explaining why I believe that government no need to ban it completely instead they should limited them.

To commence with, majority of advertisements are advertising junk food such as snacks, sugary drinks and fast food, which influenced people on social media and television and leads to various health issues such as obesity and skin problems. Moreover, many ads offers fast food without knowing consequences of it. People easily encouraged by them and purchase them, even they are unnecessary. It not only has negative effect on health but also create financial burden for families. As a result, people wants to that it should be banned.

Moving on the other hand, various advertisement offers healthy food among people, for example, nowadays advertisement of 'Complain' drink is very popular amory children and parents because it is healthy as well as tasty. It increase children's energy and creativity and it has no side effects. Furthermore, food advertisements stay help people to stay updated about new food products and

services ,so people try make wise decision before purchasing it .aloy with this ,advestisement these days provide enough information of nutrients and ingredients that are involved in products .Therefore, individuals believe that it should not be banned

From my ~~pree~~ perspective , Although some ads provide advertising about junk food which leads to health problems but government should not banned them completely Instead they may impore strict rules and limited them , ~~who~~ which influence fast food.

To conclude, advertisements have both negative and positive aspects such as one side it leads to health issues and financial burden .On the other side ,it help people to stay updated and take wise decision before purchasing item .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding healthy food advertisements is not directly relevant to the core issue of whether junk food advertising causes obesity. The conclusion is a bit repetitive, and the suggestion to 'limit' advertisements is introduced late without sufficient explanation of how this would function. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific, logical evidence for why junk food advertising is or is not the primary driver of obesity, rather than listing general benefits of advertising in general.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Moving on the other hand', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'Moving on the other hand', which is not a standard transition. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally disrupted by grammatical errors, making the progression of ideas feel slightly disjointed at times. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could be improved by ensuring each paragraph has a stronger, more unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'vitul', 'sucess', 'amory', 'aloy', 'advestisement', 'impore') and some awkward collocations, such as 'advertisements of food does not the main problem'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'financial burden' and 'nutrients', the frequent spelling and word-choice errors occasionally impede the reader's flow. To improve, focus on mastering the spelling of common academic terms and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other considers', 'people wants'), missing verbs (e.g., 'should be [banned]'), and incorrect preposition usage. Some sentences are incomplete or lack necessary articles, which affects the clarity of your arguments. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb forms and sentence completion.

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