Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

today I would like to talk about the main topic of todays daily life we watched some news daily on TV and that's they tells they some peoples over eating the junk food like pizza burgers and other fast foods and the result is they get a tommy disease like obesity and I think the peoples saw right about the food advertising but in some times not every where because the if they do not any advertisment there food they get less customers and there has a chances to get there business close I adviced to the state ministers the should be make a time who go to the restourants and check the quality off food and check the dates off the products because this health problem humans fall after eating baad quality things and there restrants owners trying to give instructions about overeating with the food advertisment I think the banned of advertisment is not a good idea because any business you should visit it's runs on advertisment and the fast food is very common food off todays lives people really enjoyed it its save peoples expensive times and some peoples are tiredly coming from there home they had no energy to make food then fastfood is good option for that's in low prices and I think its not a good idea for banned on food advertisment its very helps full thing people should trying to stay away from overeating and get a healthy life eat healthy stay healty

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument regarding junk food advertising. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you provide a personal opinion, the arguments lack depth and supporting evidence. For instance, the point about businesses needing advertising to survive is relevant, but it is not expanded upon with clear examples. The structure is also problematic, as the essay is presented as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs, which hinders the clear presentation of your position. To improve, ensure each viewpoint is explored in a separate paragraph with specific, logical support.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks paragraphing, which is a fundamental requirement for a formal IELTS essay. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. There is a heavy reliance on simple conjunctions like 'and' and 'but,' with very few cohesive devices used to link ideas logically. For example, the transition from discussing advertising to suggesting government intervention is sudden and confusing. To achieve a higher score, you must organize your response into clear paragraphs (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and use a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'on the other hand' to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on informal or inaccurate phrasing. Words like 'tommy disease' (likely meaning 'stomach' or 'health' issues) and 'baad quality things' are imprecise and detract from the academic tone required for Task 2. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as 'restourants,' 'advertisment,' and 'healty,' which occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to health, marketing, and public policy, and practice using these words in their correct context to express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting primarily of simple sentences with frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'the should be make a time' and 'the banned of advertisment is not a good idea' contain significant errors that make the meaning difficult to follow. Punctuation is almost entirely absent, which makes the text difficult to parse. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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