Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in this era of youngsters who are the hobbyist of the junk food. there is some people blame to the junk food to the cause of the belly fat they think its a cause of the advertising of the fast food and it should be banned and some people are against of this statement according to me its not a bad thinking but cause of the advertising its not a big problem of the fat its a cause of the lack of the laziness of the people.

to embark on, yes new generation is eating fast food daily I huge quantity and nowadays its selling in the every street easily. some people are running ads about their fast food business or they are not providing the quality like ads they provide cheap quality in local street food and most of the youngsters are eating food daily on streets. moreover, they should be maintain hygiene on the cart they should use fresh oil and most important thing is they cannot use the stale food. so they have to Surve fresh food and use fresh material for cooking.

to commence with, there have some another causes of the increasing of the obesity, nowadays youngsters have to eat maximum fast food at the time of watching movies and then they have to do rest furthermore they should have to exercise daily and running early morning or gym daily for one to two hours because if they can exercise daily than calories can be burn and than fat can be decrease its only solution for it.

to conclude, fat is n other increase cause of the advertising of the food its a increasing cause of the laziness or peopler not doing anything for their boy like exercise.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, which is a requirement of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding advertising are somewhat repetitive and lack depth, focusing more on street food hygiene than the psychological impact of advertising. The position is clear, but the supporting evidence is underdeveloped and lacks specific examples or logical depth. The essay tends to over-generalize about 'youngsters' and 'street food' without fully engaging with the prompt's focus on the role of advertising in obesity. To improve, you should provide more specific, analytical arguments regarding the influence of marketing on consumer behavior.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'to embark on' and 'to commence with' are used incorrectly to introduce paragraphs, as they do not fit the context of the arguments. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between the two sides of the argument is abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'hobbyist of the junk food' instead of 'fond of junk food' or 'lack of the laziness' which is contradictory. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations (e.g., 'sedentary lifestyle' instead of 'laziness') and using more academic vocabulary to express your opinions and arguments more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'its a cause of the lack of the laziness of the people'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are frequent errors in the use of articles and prepositions. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word order.

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