Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays many societies obesity believing is huge issue. Numerous individuals believe that fast food advertising is significant to blame for this issue and should be banned. Others believe that junk food advertising not issue of obesity and is should not be band. I discuss both sides in these essay.

On one side, some numerous people believe that obesity is major problem. Firstly in some cities advertisement is largely blame on this problem but not these is issue. because to much stress people are eating junk food in outside is very high competition. for example, individuals are going to duties but after coming to home there is no proper food in house on that time they are ordering biryani and snacks like samosa on these eating obesity is attacking to persons but not an advertising.

From my perspective, many individuals believe that junk food advertising is not an problem but sometimes it goes to issue. beacuse some people are watching movies in telivision. while seeing that some breaks will coming on the middle on that time younger people watch obesity advertisements they addict to that and they will eat many food like mixture, sweets, and oil food items it goes becoming a obesity.

In my opinion, fast food advertisements not attend to telivision beacuse it causes to health issues like obesity and fatty problems.

In conclusion, both have there opinions. but in my way obesity is major issue because it leads so many health issues that's what every individual. I want say don't eat unwanted food items.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding stress and competition in the second paragraph is difficult to follow and does not clearly link back to the prompt's focus on advertising. The ideas are under-developed, and the reasoning is frequently obscured by language errors. While a position is stated, the lack of logical progression and supporting evidence prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on clearly explaining the link between your examples and the prompt's core question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow between and within paragraphs is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'on that time' or 'beacuse'. The transition between the discussion of the two views and your own opinion is abrupt. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, practice using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'obesity is attacking to persons', 'not attend to telivision', and 'fatty problems'. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the intended meaning is not always immediately clear. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any degree of precision or sophistication. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to health and advertising, and work on using words in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that significantly affect readability. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'advertisements not attend'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary components to be grammatically complete. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often flawed. To improve, you must focus on the basics of sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and reviewing the rules for pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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