Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In present time, people are very busy and the people use the fast food like biscuits, noodles and many junk food. So, obesity is regarded as a major problem in our society. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, other people feel that junk food advertising does nir contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. I thing junk food are very dangerous so l would like to banned to junk food.

Firstly, my opinion junk food is the mixture of chemical in the food to provide the longer time fresh. if people are eating the junk food there immunity system are weak day by day. So the people are should be banned. For example, in the modern time people are lazy, weakness and fatigue this type of thing to be seen case of junk food.

On the other hand, people think that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned because the many people are busy in there job, personal time and family time there aren't many time to making food. It usually use the junk food. This type of people are feel that junk food not problem of obesity and should not be banned.

In conclusion, present time very much people depends on junk food but it is very harmful in our life. So don't use very much of junk food it means don't eating junk not eat but minimum quantity of use. So, my opinion is junk food is banned in the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that junk food contains chemicals and affects the immune system, these points are not fully expanded with strong evidence or logical depth. The arguments regarding why some people oppose a ban are also quite brief and repetitive. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations and specific examples to support your claims, ensuring that each paragraph contributes significantly to the overall discussion rather than simply restating the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'So the people are should be banned' is confusing and does not logically connect to the previous sentence. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'This type of people are feel that junk food not problem'. To achieve a higher score, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'nevertheless') and ensure that your sentences flow naturally from one to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'junk food', 'people', and 'problem'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'provide the longer time fresh' instead of 'preserve freshness' or 'extend shelf life'. You also struggle with word forms, using 'weakness' as an adjective and 'banned' incorrectly in the context of a noun. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to health and nutrition and practice using words in their correct grammatical forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'junk food are very dangerous'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I would like to banned'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, such as 'if people are eating the junk food there immunity system are weak day by day'. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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