Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent year, a vast majority of individuals believe that fast food advertising contains considereble role in the obesity . Moreover, other think that it is demonstrate any trouble to the people . let discuss both views together.
To begin with, junk food advertisement is provide misguidance to the people in many ways . first and foremost, when any person watch junk food ad on the social media platforms then he may mainly influence by them . Sometime he feels craving inside them then, he wants to order something through the various applications like dominos and pizza hut . For exxample, dominos advertise their newly launched burger by the famous cricketer jos buttler then they got signifant boost at their sales
On the contrast, many people argue that junk food filming does not contain any specific role in their lives. From my prespective i assert that, it should not be banned because By that kind of advertisement we got information about new deals which are many companies launch . With the help of these advertisement we can save our much money on the food products or even on the dairy products so it also contains valuable role in our lives . To illustrate , On the date 25 august 2016 pizzaplus gave one large pizza with one free and they gave this information by their instagram page so 1.5 million people grab that offer.
In conclusion, junk food advertisement misguide the people but evn it provides sufficient information of their various deals which helps us to save our money on food items
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on junk food advertising and providing a clear personal opinion. The writer argues both that advertising misguides people into consuming unhealthy food and that it provides useful information about deals that save money. However, the ideas are relatively basic and lack deep extension. For instance, the example about Dominos and Jos Buttler is somewhat underdeveloped, and the specific date and statistic provided for 'pizzaplus' feel improvised rather than grounded in well-reasoned argument. The position is stated clearly in the second body paragraph, but the overall development fits the Band 6 descriptor where ideas are relevant yet somewhat under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, showing an overall logical arrangement. Paragraphing is attempted, though some paragraphs are short or run together in terms of structural flow. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'On the contrast', and 'In conclusion', but referencing and linking within sentences are frequently faulty or mechanical (e.g., 'then he may mainly influence by them', 'so it also contains valuable role'). Furthermore, punctuation errors such as spaces before commas and missing capitals disrupt the reading flow, aligning the text closely with a Band 5 profile.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'considereble', 'misguidance', and 'signifant boost', but these are frequently misspelled or misused. There are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors throughout the response, such as 'junk food filming' instead of advertising, 'contains considereble role' instead of plays a considerable role, and 'grab that offer'. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. Spelling mistakes ('considereble', 'exxample', 'signifant', 'prespective', 'evn') occur regularly and cause some difficulty, placing this criterion at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in tense, voice, and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'junk food advertisement is provide misguidance', 'he may mainly influence by them', and 'many companies launch' (incorrect word order/omitted relative pronoun). Passive structures are handled poorly ('is demonstrate any trouble', 'advertised... by the famous cricketer'). Punctuation is also problematic with irregular spacing around punctuation marks and lowercase letters at the start of sentences. These frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader are characteristic of a Band 5 performance.
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