Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

it is often calimed by people that, in some societies and abesity is regarded as a major problem because people that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned.wherease, other feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the pronlem of abesity and should not be bannned.This essay will comapre and conrtrast the opinion along with the viewpoint that will be elucidated subsequently

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Intitiating with the points supporting the first school of thought, primarily, nowdays some person eat junk food it is more side effect in their pepole body such as heart problem and leaver damage, there has face more problem. it is not perfect human,To elaborate my stance, a survey was conducted by the ministary of united kingdom staing that 72.3 percent od masses deem that the about statement is true due to given reason.

On the contrary, people who hold another viewpoint say that when junk food not banned beause people make to job some peple not educationed so that why it is pracsed to junk food this is not prefact, they believe that,nowadays masses are weel awar of because of the chnges that are happwnigin in that current developing society, in fact, to exemplify, a renowent scientist named , takashi kovacs, who is also a professar im=n bristrol university has confiremend the opinion in has recent reasearch.

To conculde, junk food is not better in human body, beause face thire are many problem and health food is signifiant in people body and people easliy make thire food in home it is more better

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding junk food advertising and obesity, and provides a concluding stance. However, the development of ideas is severely hindered by severe language barriers. While the student mentions arguments for both sides—such as health issues associated with junk food and the counter-argument regarding personal choice and awareness—these points are underdeveloped, repetitive, and heavily obscured by poor expression. The position is stated rather than clearly reasoned or well supported with clear examples. This aligns with the Band 4 descriptor, where the response approaches the task minimally and ideas are unclear and insufficiently developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The overall organisation of the essay is heavily disrupted by extreme difficulties with sentence boundaries, erratic punctuation (such as spaces before commas and periods), and improper paragraphing. While there are some transitional attempts such as 'Intitiating with the points supporting' and 'On the contrary', cohesive devices are largely misused or mechanically applied. Referencing is unclear, and the progression of ideas fails to flow logically, resulting in a text where information and ideas are not arranged coherently, matching the Band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling errors throughout (e.g., 'calimed' for claimed, 'abesity' for obesity, 'wherease' for whereas, 'pronlem' for problem, 'minitary' for ministry, 'staing' for stating, 'renowent' for renowned, 'professar' for professor, 'confiremend' for confirmed, 'reasearch' for research). The limited range of vocabulary and persistent errors in word choice and spelling severely strain the reader and frequently impede communication, which clearly fits the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists almost entirely of severe structural errors, run-on sentences, and faulty complex sentence attempts (e.g., 'nowdays some person eat junk food it is more side effect in their pepole body'). There is a complete lack of control over basic sentence construction, verb forms, and plurals. Errors are pervasive and constantly distort meaning, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message, which is characteristic of the Band 4 descriptor.

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