Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

At some places people say that advertising of fast food is a cause to motivate individuals towards fast food and these show off of junk food is a cause of obesity and it should be banned. However, many citizens think that posters of ready meal are not a source of obesity.

Talking about view of those people who say that show off junk food like pizza and burgers is a way to inhance obesity. If we are driving a car on raod within a city and we see adds of different brands of fast food, we feel hungary. Automatically we reveal wish to eat junk food. Kind of such people which are foodie ,they always find new places or newly opened brands to taste junk food. Personaly I agree with those individuals who say that ready meal like burgers are major problem to make poeple faty. I have many examples to prove such view. My younger brother eat junk food at daily bases and he says that his servival without fast food is not possible. He eat junk food three times a day and he is suffering with obesity. He can never walk properly. Doctors adviced him leave fast ready meals.

In other words, using junk food is not good for human health and government should banned advertising of such kind of meals. Younge generation of our country will not agree with view of such people who say that fast food and its show off should be banned. If we are travilling through these in which slow meal is not available we can use junk food to fulfill our hunger but slow food sholud be at first sight.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that advertising of junk food causes obesity and should be banned, and that it does not—while also providing a clear personal opinion. The writer's position is stated directly: "Personaly I agree with those individuals who say that ready meal like burgers are major problem to make poeple faty." However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and relies heavily on personal anecdotes, such as the example of the younger brother eating fast food daily, rather than broader societal arguments. While the prompt asks for own ideas and examples, the arguments remain a bit narrow and repetitive. Nevertheless, the requirements of the prompt are covered, placing this response securely at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some organization, but the overall progression is disrupted by poor paragraphing and a lack of clear cohesive links. The response is divided into only three massive blocks of text, with the second paragraph running on for an extended length without adequate structural breaks. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic or repetitive manner, such as "Talking about view of those people" and "In other words". Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making the flow somewhat mechanical and difficult to follow in places. This corresponds closely to the Band 5 descriptor where organization is present but lacks clear overall progression and effective paragraphing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical and spelling errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples of inaccurate word choices and misspellings include "inhance" instead of enhance, "adds" instead of ads, "hungary" instead of hungry, "faty" instead of fat, "servival" instead of survival, and "Younge generation". While the student attempts to use some less common words, the noticeable and recurrent errors in spelling and word formation cause some difficulty for the reader. This fits the profile of Band 5 lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as "My younger brother eat junk food at daily bases", "He eat junk food three times a day", and "Doctors adviced him leave fast ready meals". Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also weak, leading to run-on thoughts and awkward phrasing like "If we are travilling through these in which slow meal is not available". Because the errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, a Band 4.5 or 5.0 is appropriate, leaning to 5.0 as the meaning can ultimately be deciphered.

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