Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the community, obesity is the main cause . Some people think that fast food industry responsibility to people obese, advertisement is largely blame for this issue and should be prohibited. While, other observe that junk food advertisement does not banned because it not cause problem. I discuss both view points in upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand , advertising a fast food in marketing is the main cause First of all it promote the unhealthy norms, nowadays children like junk food because it easy to exposure normalizes poor diet and casual over eating. they can easily buy. In addition , they target the youth , marketing heavily influence children's food preference before they now about the nutritious . For example every nation , most of people or youth prefer unhealthy food because it easy to buy easily to eat. They not think about the nutrition and protein if they watch any junk food adds they try to buy quick as they can get.
On the other hand side, Advertising does not contribute the problem because it personal responsibility of people. They have their own personal choice to eat unhealthy food not government interference , they know that what is good for health or not . Another factor is it harm the economic of companies, if government banned junk food it not only effect the companies but it also effect on the retail jobs , then it also efferct media outlets. So people can eat junk food just like for the taste not for starving . For example, If government banned junk food it effect the jobs like retail jobs delivery jobs and so on that related to the food centre.
In conclusion, advertising play an important role to promote poor diet food, but it only part of a complex weight inducing environment. Resticting fast food is protect the children, but long-term improvement require better access of affordable healthy food., active lifestyle and public education.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For example, the student mentions that junk food promotes unhealthy norms and targets youth, but these points are not fully extended with precise explanations or sophisticated examples. The position is stated in the introduction and conclusion, but the reasoning is often simplistic. This performance aligns best with Band 5.0, where the task is addressed, but ideas remain underdeveloped and restricted.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor transitions and awkward linking phrases, such as 'While, other observe that junk food advertisement does not banned' and 'On the other hand side'. Cohesive devices are often used inaccurately or mechanically, and referencing is unclear at times. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to guide the reader smoothly through the arguments. This level of organization and cohesive control corresponds to Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'food', 'problem', 'cause', and 'eat'. There are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'fast food industry responsibility to people obese', 'easy to exposure', and 'harm the economic of companies'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of discussion, the frequent errors and limited range prevent the score from reaching a higher band. This reflects the characteristics of Band 5.0 in Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but most complex structures are grammatically flawed and contain frequent errors. Examples include 'if government banned junk food it not only effect the companies but it also effect on the retail jobs' and 'advertising play an important role to promote poor diet food'. Errors in subject-verb agreement, verb forms, tense consistency, and punctuation are widespread and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Because grammatical control is weak and error frequency is high, this corresponds to a Band 4.5 or 5.0, comfortably fitting Band 5.0 for a limited range of structures with frequent errors.
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