Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Without any doubt, it is true that, fast food leads various health problems such as fat, liver issues and many more. In few societies, excess body fat is a big health issue. They belives that fast food advertising is majorly blame for this problem and it should be banned. Whereas, other think that advertising junk food does not contribute to any problem like obesity and should not be banned . So, the upcoming paragraphs will disscus both view points along with my own point of view with relivent examples and valid reasons .

To begin with, there are plethora of reasons in favour of first nation. To commence with first, most of the people come to know about the newly lounched food by the advertisements. Well, that type of adverstisements convince people to try fast food which further leads to obesity. For instance, a survey conducted by SK company in 2024 that proves that 65% og individuals have fast food after watching advertisements.

On the other hand, nowadays, everyone has hectic lifestyle due to which people do not have enough time to prepare food at home, just because to this reason individuals always give priority to junk food and suffer from health problems. In that case, advertisements does not plays any role.

In conclusion, everone has its own view opint some are in favour of this nation while, other are againts it. In my opinion, advertising is not a major reason of people having fast food . As most of individuals have junk food just because they do not have time to make food at home.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on junk food advertising and providing a personal opinion in the conclusion. The position is clear throughout, and the main ideas are supported with relevant arguments, such as the influence of advertisements on consumption and the impact of busy lifestyles. However, some ideas remain slightly under-developed due to limited elaboration and occasional lexical limitations, placing the response solidly at Band 5.5 to Band 6. Specifically, phrases like 'a survey conducted by SK company' lack contextual depth, and the arguments could be extended further to fully meet higher band descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear division into introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. The student uses standard transitional markers such as 'To begin with', 'To commence with first', and 'On the other hand', but expressions like 'just because to this reason' and referencing errors disrupt the natural flow of ideas. Paragraphing is present and logically separates the different viewpoints, but paragraph transitions and internal referencing could be managed more skilfully to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic ideas about obesity and advertising. However, there is a noticeable presence of spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'belives' instead of 'believes', 'disscus' instead of 'discuss', 'relivent' instead of 'relevant', 'lounched' instead of 'launched', and 'opint' instead of 'opinion'. While these errors do not severely impede overall communication, they prevent the text from achieving a higher rating, as the range of vocabulary remains basic and attempts at less common lexical items are often inaccurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over basic sentence patterns. However, frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing appear throughout the response. Examples include 'fast food leads various health problems' (missing preposition), 'advertising is majorly blame for this problem' (incorrect form), and 'advertisements does not plays any role' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation and phrasing errors like 'everone has its own view opint some are in favour of this nation' further restrict the score. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.

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