Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Today, obesity is the the major problem faced by the vast population in the society. Some people believe that junk food advertising is responsible for this problem. While, some supporter argued that this type of junk food marketing doe not contribute to the problem and should not be banned. I believe that, promoting junk will not cause obesity.
On the one hand, a sack of people claims that publicize the junk food is major reason behind the obesity. They thinks that after watching this content people are more inclined towards consuming the junk food and become the victim of obesity. Advertisment effect psychological on the individuals mind and release the hormones which force the people to eat fastfood. Junk food seller gives frequent adverstise on the television and on social media to increse the sell of their food and attracts huge number of public. They implement very smart technique to sell their food. Furthermore due to the taste bud memory preserve in the brain will active just by looking the video or image of that specific food.
On the other hand, some supporters believe that obesity is not the result of the advertise of the junk food. Promoting food on television or on different platflorm does not cause obesity, it is individuals personal choice to consume the fastfood. However, an adult is having mature thinking and decision taking power that they do influence by such content and eat the food. Just by watching the marketing of such food on one will attract towards the food, it is purely based on the hormonal activity which force the body to attract toward that particular food.
In conlusion, these advertisement should not be banned, as it not the right way to control the obesity in the society. In contrary to that government should implement some guildlines on selling these type of food
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on junk food advertising and providing a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion regarding advertising relies heavily on vague references to 'hormonal activity' and 'taste bud memory' without substantive elaboration or real-world examples. The student's position is clear throughout, but the arguments lack the depth and extension required for higher bands. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, fitting the criteria for Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with standard paragraphing, utilizing conventional signposts such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical cohesion. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in sentences like 'They thinks that after watching this content people are more inclined...' where pronoun reference and transitions feel slightly disjointed. Paragraphing is present and separates the opposing views, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs requires more precise connective devices.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting some less common phrases such as 'taste bud memory' and 'decision taking power'. However, there are numerous word choice and collocation errors, as well as spelling mistakes ('publicize' instead of 'publicising', 'Advertisment', 'platflorm', 'guildlines', 'conlusion'). The vocabulary is sometimes basic or used unnaturally, for example, 'a sack of people' instead of 'a section of people' or 'many people'. These lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is heavily marred by frequent grammatical errors. Examples of errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('some supporter argued', 'They thinks'), article misuse ('the the major problem'), and awkward word order ('an adult is having mature thinking and decision taking power that they do influence by such content'). While the basic meaning usually remains understandable, the frequency of errors across both simple and complex structures prevents the writing from achieving a higher band.
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