Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some people belive that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. Other feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should be banned.
In devlop cities many company and factory are being advertising there junk product . Like noodloes , bicuits , fry packed food . People are using it daily by seeing the advertisiment. Beacuse of the wrong advertising people are consuming it . Like company is advertising of low calories, zero sugar , no fat ect . By wacting wrong advertisement people is being attracted and consuming it daily. so, it should be banned.
On the other hand, many feels that adverting does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned . Some how it may be right because many people are using in there daily life . Cause of the busyness in there life it is being easy to prepare and eat .
It save there time and go for futher works. Like a person is working in the office frome 8 to 8 , 12 hours of duty . so, it is imposible to prepare a food in their daily life and is easy to have.
In my opinion, junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Beacause if people are consuming it they should care about there health . They should go for gym or do yoga .
Use it in a limit way .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to discuss both views regarding junk food advertising and obesity, and provides a personal opinion at the end. However, the task is addressed only partially because the student misunderstood the prompt's second view, erroneously writing that advertising 'should be banned' in both the introduction and the second sentence, which contradicts the prompt's instruction that some feel it should not be banned. Furthermore, the ideas are limited and under-developed, relying on repetitive points about convenience and people needing to go to the gym. Examples provided, such as working 12 hours from 8 to 8, are somewhat relevant to convenience but lack deeper analysis. These limitations place the response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, showing some basic organisation with introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and cohesive devices are often missing, inadequate, or repetitive. For instance, the transition between paragraphs relies on basic connectors like 'On the other hand,' but the internal linking of sentences is weak. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the pronoun use in 'many feels that adverting does not contribute... Some how it may be right because many people are using in there daily life.' Paragraphing is also erratic, with the conclusion merged closely into the final thoughts without proper separation. These features correspond to a Band 4.5, rounded to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that heavily strain the reader, such as 'belive' for believe, 'devlop' for developed, 'noodloes' for noodles, 'bicuits' for biscuits, 'advertisiment' for advertisement, and 'Beacause' for because. The range of vocabulary is limited to very simple terms like 'food', 'time', and 'health'. There are attempts at less common words like 'calories', 'zero sugar', and 'obesity', but they are marred by collocation and spelling mistakes such as 'fry packed food' and 'wrong advertising'. This level of lexical control reflects Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing contains a very limited range of structures, predominantly simple sentences linked incorrectly with punctuation or basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to severe grammatical breakdowns, such as 'By wacting wrong advertisement people is being attracted and consuming it daily.' There are constant errors in subject-verb agreement ('company and factory are being advertising', 'many feels'), preposition use ('advertising of low calories'), and tense usage. Punctuation errors are also widespread, including lowercase letters at the start of sentences and misuse of commas. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and align with a Band 4.0.
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