Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In our society obesity is a huge problem . Majority of people think that advertising junk food is mainly reason for the problem of obesity and this should be banned . However, on the other hand people believe that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity . In my opinion junk food is unhealthy for our physical health . there are lot of side effect in our body and also play a huge role in obesity

firstly, there are majority of people believe that prompting junk food advertising mainly brings a lot of problem . Like obesity is the main reason that comes from eating unhealthy food like junk food and fast food . junk food cause our body with too much diseases , serious injury for e.g : skin problems , liver problem also effect on our immune system and heart attack problem . Like nowadays heart attack ratio increase too much in our younger generation because of eating too much junk food and majority of people think it should be banned .

However, others feel that eating junk food is mainly not create any type of problem like obesity , heart attack problem and liver or digestive system problem . Increasing obesity is from not walking too much or not playing any kind of physical activities such as football , cricket , basketball , and tennis and that's the reason of people increasing their fat too much and after all people blaming on advertising junk food and thing that should be banned .

In conclusion, In my opinion junk food play a vital role in obesity because eating too much unhealthy food had a lot of side effect in our body . Meanwhile obesity slightly increase because people are not do any kind of leisure physical activity but this is not an necessary reason of obesity increase as compare to junk food .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on junk food advertising and providing a clear personal opinion. The student attempts to present arguments for the ban, such as the rise in health issues like obesity and heart attacks among younger generations, and against the ban, attributing weight gain to a lack of physical activity instead. However, the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack deeper elaboration or specific external examples, which keeps the response at a Band 6. The position is clear throughout, and the main arguments are identifiable despite some under-development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a standard four-paragraph essay structure. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, cohesive devices are often mechanical, repetitive, or awkward, as seen with transitions like 'firstly, there are majority of people believe' and 'However, on the other hand people believe'. Referencing and logical progression are occasionally hindered by clumsy phrasing and punctuation errors, meaning cohesion is sometimes faulty. These features align best with Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic ideas about health, obesity, and advertising. There are several attempts to use less common items such as 'digestive system problem' and 'immune system', but these are accompanied by frequent word-choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'prompting junk food advertising', 'cause our body with too much diseases'). Spelling is generally acceptable, but noticeable inaccuracies in word formation and phrasing restrict the range and precision, placing this response securely in Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('junk food cause our body', 'people are not do'), missing articles ('in our society obesity is a huge problem'), and awkward clause structures ('thing that should be banned'). Punctuation errors are also common, such as incorrect spacing before periods and commas. Because these errors recur frequently and occasionally cause the reader some difficulty, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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