Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's era, obesity become a major health related problem for societies. Some people aruge that fast food advertising play significant role in health issue and it should be banned. While others believe that, food advertising is not effect on this problem and there are benifits of post so banned is not a solution. In this essay I discussed both of view before giving any opinion about why advertising should be banned.

To begin with, there are a verious resone why add banned should be a gerat idia. Firstly, childern mostly watch a television and soicial sides,a lots of add come in there feed due to this kids greddeness towards fast is increased. for example, macdonals add in they shows there product are very testy and health which is actully not there potato fries have lots of calaries. Secondly, childrens dont know about diffrents about healthy food and unhealthy food. If addveris come again and again in them feed they want to try them and so that the them total calaries was increase.

On the other hand who is against to banned addvetis, they say it not effect on body fast. Activey life style is responseble form our health after having this thypes of junk food liitle exercise shold help to people to live healthy life. However, some time T.V add casting a healthy products list. So, individual can compare there products with other comapny and get benifits.Thus, advertising is not affect to our health.

In conclusion, according to health organization dont relly on fast food it directly coordiante to our body. due to this culture, many people facing a helath related problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on junk food advertising and providing an opinion, which meets the basic requirements of the prompt. The student presents arguments regarding why advertisements should be banned, such as targeting children and increasing calorie consumption, as well as counter-arguments focusing on active lifestyles and personal choice. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on active lifestyles is underdeveloped, and the reasoning jumps quickly without deep elaboration. Furthermore, the position in the introduction is slightly confusing ('In this essay I discussed both of view before giving any opinion about why advertising should be banned'). Due to the under-development of ideas and minor lapses in clarity of position, this performance aligns with Band 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay has a basic organizational structure with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used, but referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'who is against to banned addvetis, they say it not effect on body fast'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from abrupt shifts in ideas and lack of smooth logical flow. The overarching progression lacks the flexibility required for higher bands, placing this response firmly at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently constrained by spelling and word-form errors that reflect a limited range. Examples include 'aruge' for argue, 'greddeness' for greediness, 'testy' for tasty, 'calaries' for calories, and 'addvetis' for advertisements. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to health and advertising, such as 'obesity', 'fast food', and 'advertising', the high frequency of spelling and word-choice errors causes some difficulty for the reader. There is little evidence of less common lexical items used with precision. These characteristics correspond directly to the Band 5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic sentence patterns. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to severe grammatical inaccuracies that obscure meaning in places. Notable errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('obesity become', 'add banned should be'), incorrect tense usage ('this culture, many people facing'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic throughout the text, with run-on sentences and comma splices. Because the grammatical errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, this warrants a Band 5.0 score.

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