Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays world, obesity is main issue, where some people reckon that fast food is main reason for this through promotional labels and it should be prohibit, while other argue that it is not true because people do not have enough time for nutrition diet and lost there appetite both the point will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

One of the main reason for obesity people do not have enough time to prepair proper diet at home because of their work. For example, many people are lived in cities for there work or study, so that time they saw posters in wall, which provided fast food delvery at home with in minute, thus encourage people place oder, which create obesity. Therefore, government should take strick action towards these posters or online apps, which provided food for people and effects individuals health.

On the other hand, many people think media formats do not encouage people to buy fast food but people want to shopes or market to eat that food because mostly people lost their appetite. For instance, many student live in hostel and the food was not nutrition as well as tasteless, so student choose to eat fast food. Many people spend their money to pay hostel food but it not according to their taste for this reason children focus on fast food rather than mass food in hostel because they think it is helathy, but they use unhealth items to prepare that food, which also create health problem for children.

To conclusion, obesity is not depend on junk food advertising because if government banned these apps and posters, which promot people to eat fast food, but it will be incrsase through hostel food and crater health peoblem for children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a concluding position, so the response is relevant to the question. The first body paragraph links advertising and convenient delivery with increased fast-food consumption, while the second offers a different explanation: students may choose fast food because hostel meals are unappealing. However, the position is not fully clear. The introduction suggests advertising should be prohibited, but the conclusion says obesity does not depend on advertising and focuses on banning apps and posters, leaving your own view difficult to identify. Some reasoning is also unclear, particularly the claim that people have “lost their appetite.” Develop each side more directly and explain whether advertising is a major cause, a contributing factor, or not a cause.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic structure, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a change in viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from work schedules to posters, delivery apps, obesity, and government action without clearly explaining each link. The conclusion also introduces a confusing contrast between banning advertising and hostel food. Some linking expressions are used mechanically, and references such as “both the point” are unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence, using more precise links between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “obesity,” “advertising,” “nutrition,” and “government,” and you attempt phrases such as “take strict action.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to understand. For example, “lost their appetite” does not clearly express why people choose fast food, and “mass food in hostel” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “delvery,” “strick,” and “helathy” are noticeable, while repeated use of “people,” “food,” and “fast food” limits variety. Build a more accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling; use precise expressions such as “unhealthy meals,” “convenient delivery,” and “advertising campaigns.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “so,” and “which.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles frequently make the reader work to understand the message. For example, “obesity is main issue” lacks an article, “many people are lived in cities” uses an incorrect verb form, and “both the point will be discussed” has an agreement error. The final sentence beginning “To conclusion” is also difficult to parse because its clauses do not form a clear grammatical relationship. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time and check agreement and tense.

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