Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the present. this is a very common issue that the individual are facing around the global because the all hard work doing by meachies. In this contemporary era, many residantal place aurged that corpulence is a major issue, Some citizen believed that it can be caused by eating fast food and concernd that all the junk places must be closed, Other contented that promotion cannot be a source of this problem and it not be banned. However, the need is that the CFC and other shopes of junk foods must be minimum in the cities

One significient reason is that obesity is a major issue around the global. and it creates many diseases such as baly fat and other boby peoblem. so it can be caused when people cannot go for walk and sitting many houres and not be going to any fitness center. but fast food play a little role in this issue. because when people cannot eat nutral foods and always go to fast food shopes and eat pizza and other items. for example in nurals areas where people are more healthy. because in this places all the individuals go walk and do their work by their own pace

Futhermore, advertising is a occcupation of many people and they can be earn through this and meet there expainsion. Although obesity can effect all the orgens of our boby and hearth issues. but it cannot be creates by promoting the adds of junk foods

In my perspective, while jung food advertising clearly influences eating habits, obesity is ultimately caused by personal life style choices and lack of education. Therefore, I belive advarsitising should not be banned but strictly regulated, and the focus should be on promoting healthy lifestyles.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a personal position in the final paragraph: advertising should be regulated rather than banned, and healthy lifestyles should be promoted. You also mention arguments about both advertising and other causes of obesity. However, the discussion is only partial: the case for banning advertising is not clearly explained, while the opposing view is asserted rather than supported. The claim that advertising “cannot be a source” also conflicts with your conclusion that it influences eating habits. Examples such as people’s activity levels and eating habits are relevant, but the rural-area example is unclear and does not establish the point convincingly. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific example, then keep your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for the introduction, reasons, advertising, and your opinion, so there is some organisation. Basic linking words such as “However,” “Furthermore,” and “Therefore” help signal relationships. Nevertheless, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the first body paragraph shifts between disease, exercise, fast food, and rural areas without clearly connecting these points. The next paragraph introduces advertising as an occupation, but its relevance to whether adverts cause obesity is not made explicit. Some links are also unclear, particularly “for example in nurals areas where people are more healthy.” Organise the body around one view per paragraph, use topic sentences, and make each example directly support the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “obesity,” “advertising,” “regulated,” “eating habits,” and “healthy lifestyles.” These choices show awareness of the subject and allow the reader to identify your main position. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “residantal place aurged,” “nutral foods,” and “meet there expainsion.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “the CFC and other shopes of junk foods” and “baly fat.” Aim for accurate, familiar topic vocabulary before attempting less common terms, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise wording would make your arguments easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “Although obesity can effect all the orgens of our boby and hearth issues. but it cannot be creates by promoting the adds of junk foods.” This shows an effort to express contrast, but the clause is not correctly joined and the verb forms are faulty. Errors in agreement and sentence construction also occur in “the individual are facing” and “it can be caused when people cannot go for walk.” Several sentences begin with lowercase words or are separated by full stops where the ideas need clearer punctuation. These frequent problems sometimes make meaning hard to interpret. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, verb forms, and joining clauses with “although,” “because,” and “but.”

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