Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this statement talks about a people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blam for this problem and should be banned but some people believe that junk food should not be banned. I completely believe with both views and i will explain in the following.

Nowadays, people like junk food they don't healthy food but some reasons are provided therefore more people like junk food. Some people believe that junk food should not be banned because according to the people junk food does not contribute to the problems of obesity. I think this opinion is completely right. Some people more ate junk food so different major problems is contributed. If people ate low junk food so does not contributed major problems. Therefore, i believe that junk food should not be banned.

Some people believe that junk food should be banned. I think this opinion is completely right because junk food advertising is largely blame for this problems. While large problem to contribute for junk food all people cannot buy because junk food is expensive. For example, some rich people buy junk food but poor people cannot buy junk food. On the other hand junk food contributed some diseases and different problems.

In conclusion,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You attempt to discuss both positions and state opinions, but the response only minimally addresses the question. The opening says, “I completely believe with both views,” which leaves your own position unclear, and the arguments are not developed enough to explain how advertising affects obesity or why it does not. The example about rich people buying junk food and poor people being unable to afford it does not clearly support the claim that advertising should be banned. The conclusion is unfinished, so the discussion has no final judgement. The response is also 196 words, 54 words below the required minimum; nine words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Develop each view with relevant reasoning and examples, then state a consistent opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” signal transitions. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear, coherent progression: the first body paragraph shifts between people’s preferences, obesity and whether junk food should be banned without explaining the links. The second paragraph’s contrast between rich and poor consumers is also difficult to connect to the claim about advertising. Repeated statements such as “I think this opinion is completely right” do not advance the discussion, and the conclusion is left blank. Plan one paragraph for each view and use clear links between claim, explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “junk food,” “people,” “problems” and “believe.” Some wording communicates the topic, including “obesity,” “advertising” and “diseases,” but several choices are inaccurate or unclear, such as “different major problems is contributed” and “large problem to contribute for junk food.” There is also a spelling error in “blam.” These limitations sometimes make it hard to understand the intended argument, particularly where you discuss who can buy junk food. Build a more precise range for discussing causes and effects—for example, terms such as “promote,” “consumption” and “health risks”—and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple clauses, with little variety in sentence structure. Frequent errors in sentence formation and verb forms sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “In this statement talks about a people believe” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “If people ate low junk food so does not contributed major problems” has an incomplete conditional structure and an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with agreement and articles, as in “different major problems is contributed.” A few sentences, such as “Some people believe that junk food should be banned,” are understandable, but control is inconsistent. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate conditional patterns, then proofread for tense, agreement and punctuation.

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