Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is a debatable issue is overweight is a main problem in some socital cultural. some group of people believe blame for this problem is junk food adds and they should be banned. on the other hand some argued that advertisement not play vital role in obesity and should not be banned. both the views disscus in further ensuing paragraph.

Some societies, substantially blame outside food adds for major problem of obesity. At present individuals influence through adds easily for instance children are the likely to it. Moreover , sedentiery life style and eat fast food is major cause for weight gain. These type of adds should be banned due to it has an negative impect on people life style. These type of junk food is easily avilable in the streets and peole are workoholic so they dont have enough time to home made food and purchase proccesed food from the market watch through adds. Additionally, people talk to each other for trying new food and they want to try.

On the other hand, some argued that, junk food adds does not contribute to the problem of obesity due to some hormonal imbalance play vital role in human phuysical health. Further more physical exercies is the essential for the human being to stay healthy. In some cases medical related disease also weight gain it should not be neglected.

To put it in a nutshell, most of the junk food adds are infulence the public to buy it and it is a major reason for the obesity. but it should not be banned government should restrict on them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a final position: you first argue that advertising can influence people, then present hormonal and medical factors, and conclude that advertising should be restricted rather than banned. This is relevant to the question, but the discussion is only partial and the position is not fully clear: the conclusion says advertising is a major reason for obesity, yet also says it should not be banned, without explaining the distinction between restriction and a ban. Several points are asserted rather than developed, such as children being especially influenced and hormonal imbalance contributing to weight gain. Explain how each factor affects obesity and support the claims with a specific example or evidence. The response meets the stated length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding paragraph. This helps readers identify the broad direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from advertising’s influence to sedentary lifestyles, food availability, work habits, and social recommendations without clearly showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “Moreover,” “On the other hand,” and “To put it in a nutshell” are used, but some connections feel mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. The conclusion also introduces a distinction between banning and restricting ads that has not been developed earlier. Group related points and use clearer references and transitions to show how each supports the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “obesity,” “hormonal imbalance,” “physical exercise,” and “processed food,” and you attempt to express ideas about advertising and lifestyle. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word choice, and collocation are noticeable, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “socital cultural,” “adds,” “sedentiery life style,” and “workoholic”; “outside food” is also unclear in this context. Repeated use of “major problem,” “vital role,” and “these type” limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and word forms. More accurate choices such as “advertisements,” “sedentary lifestyle,” and “people with demanding work schedules” would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “due to” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to understand. The opening, “It is a debatable issue is overweight is a main problem,” has an unclear clause structure. Other examples include “some argued that … does not contribute,” where the verb form and agreement are inconsistent, and “These type of adds should be banned due to it has,” which has problems with number and clause construction. Articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause before attempting longer structures.

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