Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I agree to the fact that Obesity has become a major concern in today's world. Most of the people living in three-tier cities are obese. Many of them believe that junk food advertising is to the blame and should be banned. However, most of them also believe that advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

On the one hand, some of the advertising companies tend to influence people to buy some food products that are not even healthy. If I give an example, Maggie was once banned because it was harmful to the children. Banning is the only solution that should be considered by the government. Many companies advertise for their own good sake or for their advantages but they don't realise that they'll influence something that even they don't eat. If you have seen the advertisement for "Juban Kesari", it is advertised by the top Bollywood actors for just sake of money as they won't eat that as they know it's not good for their body. Because they consume such food that contains fats and carbs, they tend to become obese.

On the other hand, I do believe to an extent that if you are smart enough and you can figure out that this is not good for your health, then I don't think anything can influence you. So you need to be mentally strong so that nothing can influence you. It really doesn't matter that the product is banned or not as long as it doesn't affect you. And if so, it shouldn't be banned.

In conclusion, I would say that junk food advertising really affects you only if you get influenced by but if you know what's good for your health, nothing can make you fall under the category of obese.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a position: you argue that advertising can influence consumers, while also saying people can resist it. The examples of Maggi and celebrity endorsements are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The first view is supported mainly by assertions that companies promote unhealthy products and that banning is the only solution; the second relies on individual self-control, without considering how advertising may affect children or shape choices. Your opening also says that “most” people hold both opposing views, which makes the contrast unclear. State your own position more decisively and explain the reasoning behind each side with specific, relevant support. (The 14 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the two sides. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the claim that celebrities promote a product “for just sake of money” is followed by a statement about what they eat, then a general claim about fats and obesity; the connection to whether advertising should be banned needs to be made explicit. The conclusion largely repeats the earlier point rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the argument it is intended to support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “advertising,” “banned,” “influence,” and “obese.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “mentally strong” and “fats and carbs.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations sound unnatural or imprecise, which can make the argument less clear. Examples include “to the blame,” “for their own good sake,” and “fall under the category of obese.” Repetition of “influence” and “good” also limits precision. Aim for more natural academic phrasing and choose terms that describe the issue accurately, such as consumer choices, unhealthy products, and obesity risk.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including conditional forms such as “if you are smart enough … then I don't think anything can influence you” and subordinate clauses beginning with “because.” Meaning is generally understandable, but errors remain in sentence construction and grammatical patterns. For example, “I do believe to an extent that” has an awkward structure, and “if you get influenced by” leaves the verb phrase incomplete. The opening also shifts between “most of the people” and “many of them” without a clear reference. Review verb patterns, articles, and sentence boundaries, and check that each clause has a complete, clear structure. More accurate control would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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