Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some individuals feel that junk food advertisments cause obesity because it is misleading and it should be banned. On the other hand individuals feel that junk food advertisments should not be banned because it doesn't contribute to obesity since people make their own choices.

Junk food advertisements can be the problem of obesity. For instance, when you had a long day at work and you hear a junk food advertisment, on the radio, while driving back from work, it sounds delicious, but it is misleading because it doesn't tell people about the calories the food contains. Instead of going home and preparing a healthy, home cooked meal people go and buy the junk food, which is high is calories and very unhealthy. Therefore people feel advertisments of junk food must be banned.

However there are individuals that feel that junk food advertisments should not be banned, because people have a choice not to buy the junk food. For instance, when you see the junk food advertisment of a refreshing ice-cream on a Sunday afternoon you as a cosumer have the choice to buy the ice-cream or not. Therefore people feel obesity is not cause by the advertisments, but rather by the cosumer's bad choices.

I feel that organisation needs advertisment to promote their products and it is not fair to ban advertisment, because some feel advertising junk food cause obesity. Obesity is defintly not cause by advertisments, but rather by bad food choices made by consumers. People always have a choice when deciding what they want to buy. It is not like the people advertising the food is holding a gun towards you and forcing you to buy the food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear opinion: you explain that advertising may encourage people to choose calorie-dense food, then argue that consumers remain responsible for their choices and that advertising should not be banned. The examples of hearing a radio advert after work and seeing an ice-cream advert make the discussion relevant. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the case for banning adverts is explained through one scenario, while the opposing view and your own position rely mainly on personal choice. The claim that adverts are misleading because they omit calorie information also needs support or qualification. To strengthen the response, explain more fully how advertising influences behaviour, and acknowledge why individual choice may not be sufficient to prevent obesity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction presents the two views, separate body paragraphs discuss each, and the final paragraph states your opinion. Linking expressions such as “On the other hand,” “For instance,” and “However” help readers follow the contrast, and the ideas generally progress logically. This already gives the essay a coherent arrangement. To make the progression more flexible and precise, avoid repeatedly beginning sentences with “Therefore people feel,” and connect examples more explicitly to the claims they are meant to support. The final paragraph also repeats the personal-choice argument from the previous paragraph; instead, use that space to develop a further reason or briefly recognise the opposing argument before concluding.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “junk food advertisements,” “calories,” “consumers,” and “obesity.” Phrases such as “home cooked meal” and “bad food choices” are understandable, but the vocabulary is often repetitive, especially the repeated use of “advertisements,” “people,” and “choice.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “advertisments,” “cosumer,” and “defintly,” which reduce accuracy. Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “the problem of obesity” and “high is calories.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for discussing marketing and health, and check spelling and collocations carefully so your meaning sounds more precise and academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and longer clauses, including conditional examples such as “when you had a long day at work” and contrast structures with “because” and “but.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “it doesn't contribute” refers to plural “advertisements,” and “obesity is not cause by” needs a passive verb form. In “the food is holding a gun,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “organisation needs” also needs an appropriate plural or article. The opening sentence has an unclear pronoun reference in “it is misleading.” Aim to control agreement, passive forms, articles, and pronoun references, while varying sentence patterns accurately.

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