Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience·and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, in many states people are facing the obesity, this is a serious problem because humans are not follow diet plan and several time in a day eat fast food, that thing is create physical health issues. In few societies, obesity is regarded as a main issue. Some individuals think that fast food advertising is big to blame for this mater and ought to be compleatly closed. Althrough, others argue that fast food advertising does not contribute to the issue of obesity and ought to not be banned. In this eassy, I will discuss about both these viewpoints and As far as I am concerned, people eat fast food in daily life and this type of food have extra calries and gain repidly waight, also individuals not do physical excercise and face the obesity problem.

Some individuals believe fast food advertising is a main problem create about obesity, they think that when people watching TV and other social media channels every time shows junk food advertisment. These type of ads attrect humans to force eat junk food because these ads illustrate again and again some tasty foods and people wish to eat junk food. For Example, some individuals using social media apps and when they use these apps every few minutes shows some junk food ads and oder this food. In addition every day eaten this type of food create obesity issues.

Few other people think that this type of junk food advertisment not create to the problem of obesity, they argue this issue is create because they can't fellow a proper diet plan in daily life and not do physical excercise. For instance, a healthy man adopt a diet plan, and every morning running and jogging in a park. These activities can help to reduce body weight and release brain stress, also mentain own physical health.

It is conclude, that obesity is a serious problem and this issue create because when a person can't care own body health. Moreover, we can fellow diet plans and every day do some excercise. In my opinion, we can reduce junk food and also government make strick rules about these balk showing advertising that people don't attrect in this ads and passing healthy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a personal position: you explain that advertising can encourage people to order junk food, while also noting diet and lack of exercise as causes. These points are relevant, and the examples about repeated social-media adverts and a person who exercises help illustrate them. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The argument against banning adverts is mainly about individual habits, without explaining why advertising itself may have little effect or why a ban would be inappropriate. Your own view is also not fully clear: you suggest reducing junk food and stricter advertising rules, but do not state precisely whether you support a ban. Develop each side with clearer reasoning and make your final position consistent and explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main direction of the discussion. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “In addition,” and “Moreover.” At times, however, connections are mechanical or unclear. The introduction combines background, the two positions, and your opinion in one long sequence, while the conclusion introduces stricter rules without clearly linking them to the earlier discussion. Some references, such as “these activities,” are understandable but could be more precise. Give each paragraph a clearer central point, use transitions to show contrast and cause more naturally, and ensure the conclusion directly summarises your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “obesity,” “advertising,” “diet plan,” “physical health,” and “social media.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “junk food,” “problem,” and “people.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “compleatly,” “attrect,” “calries,” and “waight,” which can make parts of the response harder to read. Some phrases are not natural in this context, for example “advertising is big to blame” and “passing healthy life.” Build a wider set of accurate collocations for causes, effects, and policy, and check spelling carefully. The vocabulary suggestions below offer practical alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “when.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader sometimes has to work to understand the intended meaning. For example, “humans are not follow diet plan” has an incorrect verb form, and “this type of food have extra calories” shows a subject–verb agreement error. In “Some individuals believe fast food advertising is a main problem create about obesity,” the clause structure is incomplete. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, then check verb forms and agreement before adding further detail.

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