Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the pie chart ullustrate the proportions of goods exports from differents EU countries to india and china in 2000 and 2011.Overall the belgium has the highest percentage in 2000 to India while the germany get the rose percentage point to china in 2000 and 2011. THE INDIA GET THE HIGHEST PROPORTIONS FROM belgium and united kingdom with 25% and 29% in 2000 whereas in 2011 , germany increase with cumb 10% .although the the percentage of goods exports to china in 2000 Germany has the rise percenrage and in second french and in 2011 it was increased 10% , so germany the highest percentage but the china have the high proportion from germany and for indina the belgium the goods exports to india but with the other countries like spain , italy and france with under 20%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two destinations and years, and you notice important features: Belgium and the UK are prominent in India’s 2000 figures, while Germany dominates exports to China in both years. However, several comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. Germany’s share of exports to India rose from 15% to 25%, not simply “increase with cumb 10%”; for China, it rose from 38% to 48%. France was not the second-largest destination for China in 2000: its 13% share was below Germany’s 38%, but above the other listed countries. The response also lacks a clear, accurate overview and does not report enough key data. It is 128 words, below the required 150, so the account is underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response around an opening statement, an overall comment and comparisons, but the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression. The overview and details run together, and the long final sentence shifts between India and China without signalling the change. Connectors such as “whereas,” “although” and “so” are used, but they do not consistently clarify the relationships between the figures; for example, “although” introduces no clear contrast. There are also no paragraph breaks to separate the overview from supporting details. Use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and separate detail paragraphs for India and China, with each comparison clearly linked to its year and destination.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “percentage” and “goods exports,” and attempt comparison language such as “highest” and “increased.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “get the rose percentage point,” “rise percenrage” and “with cumb 10%” are not clear descriptions of a share changing. Spelling errors, including “ullustrate,” “differents” and “indina,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, repeatable expressions such as “accounted for,” “share,” “rose by 10 percentage points” and “remained the largest.” Check spelling and use country names consistently with capital letters.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some complex sentences, including a comparison with “whereas” and a clause beginning “although,” but sentence control is weak and errors frequently obscure relationships between ideas. For example, “the belgium has the highest percentage” has problems with article use and subject construction, while “the germany get the rose percentage point” has faulty agreement and verb form. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, especially in the final sentence, making it difficult to identify the main point. Capitalisation and spacing after full stops are also inconsistent. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons: for example, “Germany’s share of exports to India rose from 15% in 2000 to 25% in 2011.”

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