Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie charts compare the India and china who imports goods from EU in 2000 and 2011. Belgium has a highest proportion of goods exports to India.
In India, In 2000, Germany exports 19% goods to India and it is creased and reached to 29% in 2011. United Kingdom shares 29% of goods to India in 2000 which is drastically declined and reach at 13 percent in 2011. Moreover, Belgium share quarter proportion of goods to India which slightly decreased to 20%.
In China, Germany exports highest proportion of goods in 2000 and 2011, which is 37% and 49% respectively. France exports 12% of goods in 2000 which was slightly decreased in 2011 which was 10% . Netherlands shares 4% of their goods to china in 2000 which increased and reached at 9% in 2011.
Overall, Germany has a highest proportion of goods shares and least shares has Australia to China.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, identifying key trends for both India and China. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention specific percentages, you miss opportunities to make meaningful comparisons between the two countries or across the two time periods. For instance, you could have highlighted that Germany's dominance increased in both markets, whereas the UK's share in India saw a significant decline. The overview is also quite weak; it merely restates a specific detail rather than summarizing the overall trends. To improve, ensure your overview captures the 'big picture'—such as the shift in market shares—rather than just listing individual data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Overall' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some sentences feel disconnected. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; in the final sentence, you mention 'Australia', which is not present in the provided data, causing confusion. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring that your references are accurate will help create a more cohesive and professional response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the data clearly. You use terms like 'proportion', 'drastically declined', and 'slightly decreased' effectively. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'creased and reached' (should be 'increased') and 'shares quarter proportion' (should be 'shared a quarter of the proportion'). There is also a lack of variety in your reporting verbs. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends and data analysis, and ensure that your word forms are consistently accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Germany exports' vs 'Germany exported'), incorrect tense usage ('In 2000, Germany exports'), and missing articles ('to china'). Some sentences are also awkwardly phrased, such as 'The given pie charts compare the India and china who imports goods'. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the essay from achieving a higher score. Focusing on consistent tense usage and article placement will significantly improve your accuracy.
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