Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts illustrates the proportions of exports from various EU countries to India and china in the years between 2000 and 2011.
Overall, it is clear that the UK and Germany were the largest EU exporter to India and China, respectively throughout the mention period expect UK which was over taken by Belgium.
Turning to details, in 2000 the UK had the largest proportion of EU exports with 29% followed by Belgium at 25%. Meanwhile, in china the Germany reported the largest proportion of EU exprorts with about 38%. The remaining countries were not accounted the large portion of EU exports for both India and China, collectively accounted only 54% and 62%, accordingly.
In the following years, the ration of EU exports by UK in India plunged dramatically to 13% whereas India witnessed a striking incline in percentage of EU exports from Germany, hiking to 25% by end of 2011. On the other hand china, in China, the EU exports accounted by Germany which also remained at peak in 2000 violently rolled up to 48%. Wheres there was not a noticeable change of EU exports from other nations in eleven years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, identifying key trends and making comparisons between the two years. However, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that the UK was 'overtaken by Belgium' in India, but the charts show the UK remained the largest exporter in 2011. Additionally, the statement that 'the remaining countries... collectively accounted only 54% and 62%' is mathematically inconsistent with the provided data. While you have attempted to highlight the main trends, the lack of precision in data interpretation prevents a higher score. Ensure you double-check your figures against the source material to ensure accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific details. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Turning to details', 'Meanwhile', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the sentence 'Wheres there was not a noticeable change' is grammatically disjointed and lacks a clear link to the previous point. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportions', 'plunged', and 'striking incline'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'violently rolled up' to describe an increase, and 'mention period' instead of 'mentioned period'. These errors occasionally make the text sound unnatural. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for a formal report. Avoid overly dramatic or informal descriptors like 'violently'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts illustrates'), incorrect article usage ('in china the Germany reported'), and awkward sentence construction ('the EU exports accounted by Germany... violently rolled up'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure limits the score. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.
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