Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The presented line graph illustrates the quantity of waste generated by three companies ( A, B and C) from 2000 to 2015.

In 2000, the company A was the highest contributor of producing waste which is about 12 tons. However, after fluctuating several years, the production of waste went down to approximately 8 tons in 2015.

On the other hand, company B produced 8 tons waste in starting which had gone on its peak after 5 year to 11 tons. However it decreased significantly in next years stood on just 3 tons waste.

While company C had only 4 tons waste in starting years but it started climbing and stood on almost10 tons waste which is more than other companies.

Overall, both company A and company B had reduced the production of waste while company C rose up their generation of waste.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is significantly off-topic. The task required a summary of EU exports to India and China, but the student described a line graph regarding waste production by three companies. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the score. Because the content does not address the provided prompt at all, it fails to meet the basic requirements of the task. Even if the content were relevant, the analysis is limited and lacks the necessary detail to reach a higher band. The failure to address the actual prompt results in a very low score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'However' and 'While'. The progression of ideas is logical within the context of the (incorrect) graph description, but the lack of connection to the actual task makes the overall coherence weak. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transitions between sentences do not always flow naturally. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, distinct focus that relates directly to the data provided in the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'highest contributor of producing waste' and 'stood on' are awkward and unnatural. There is a lack of precise terminology required for describing data trends (e.g., 'climbing' instead of 'increasing' or 'rising'). The student relies on basic descriptors, and there is no attempt to use more sophisticated or academic vocabulary. Spelling errors, such as 'almost10', also detract from the quality. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary to include more precise verbs and nouns for describing trends and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the company A was the highest contributor' (incorrect article usage), 'produced 8 tons waste' (missing preposition), and 'had gone on its peak' (incorrect tense and preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for articles and prepositions would help improve the accuracy of the writing.

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