Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie charts show exports from various EU countries to India and china in 2000 and 2011.
Overall, the highest in Germany EU exports of goods to china and the lowest in spain EU exports of goods to india
To begin with, in 2000, in Australia EU exports of goods to india that was 1% and in Belgium about was 25% and in Finland nearby was 8% and in Germany that was 15% and in Italy about was 7% and in Netherlands nearby was 4% and in Spain that was 2% and in Sweden about was 2% and in United Kingdom nearby was 29% and in other that was 5% Also, in 2011 EU exports of goods to india in Australia that was 2% and in Belgium about was 20%
Furthermore, in 2000, in EU exports of goods to china , in Australia that was 2% and in Belgium about was 5% and in Finland about was 6% but in 2011, in EU exports of goods to china, in Italy that was 8% and in Germany that was 48%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview or a meaningful summary of the data. Instead of selecting and reporting main features or making relevant comparisons, the text is a repetitive list of figures that does not synthesize the information. The data provided is incomplete and fragmented, failing to cover the charts comprehensively. The attempt to identify the 'highest' and 'lowest' in the introduction is inaccurate based on the provided data. To improve, you must group data logically (e.g., by country or trend) rather than listing every individual percentage, and ensure you provide a clear, analytical overview of the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical progression. The information is presented as a series of disjointed, repetitive sentences that do not flow. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often incorrect, such as the repetitive use of 'in... that was...' structures. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information into logical categories or trends. There is no clear structure to the essay, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data between 2000 and 2011. You need to use linking words to connect ideas and organize your report into clear paragraphs based on themes or time periods.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the same sentence structure and basic phrasing throughout the text. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. The constant repetition of 'in... that was...' indicates a very restricted lexical range. To improve, you should learn and apply specific vocabulary for describing statistical data and charts, and avoid repeating the same words and phrases in every sentence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in basic sentence construction, such as 'in Australia EU exports of goods to india that was 1%'. The punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and a lack of proper capitalization for proper nouns like 'India' and 'China'. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement, and then work on incorporating a variety of complex structures to describe the data more fluently.
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