Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given four pie charts illustrates the exports from various E.U. countries to india and china in 2000 and 2011:

in 2000, export of goods to india from australia is 1% whereas in 2011 it is 2%. in belgium the count is 25%whereas in 2011 the count is 20% so it is reduced by 5%. The third country is finland in 2000 the ratio of export of goods in finland is 2%. The next country is france, in 2000 8% of goods are exported to india whereas in 2011, 9% of goods are exported to india. The another country is germany, in 2000, 19% of goods are exported to india whereas in 2011, export of goods to india from germany the ratio is 25%.

The another two pie charts shows export of goods to china in 2000 and 2011:

export of goods to china from australia is 2%in

2011, it is same as of 2000,whereas in 2000 in belgium the ratio is 6% on the other hand in 2011, the ratio becomes 20% whereas in finland in 2000, the proportion is 2% whereas in 2011 the ratio is 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide an overview of the main trends or significant differences, which is a requirement for Task 1. Instead, it lists data points in a mechanical, repetitive manner. Several countries mentioned in the prompt are omitted, and the comparison between the two years is superficial. The response lacks a clear summary of the overall changes, focusing instead on individual data points without synthesizing the information. To improve, you must identify the most significant features, such as which countries saw the largest growth or decline, and group the data logically rather than listing every figure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is poorly organized. While there is an attempt to use paragraphs, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'whereas' and 'in 2000/2011'. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the referencing is often unclear. The formatting is also problematic, with excessive line breaks and inconsistent spacing, which disrupts the readability of the text. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus, such as grouping by country or by trend.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'export of goods to', 'the ratio is', and 'the count is'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'surged', 'plummeted'). Furthermore, there are errors in basic terminology, such as using 'count' or 'ratio' when referring to percentages. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider range of synonyms and precise terminology related to data analysis and trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with capitalization (e.g., 'india', 'china'), punctuation, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper subject-verb agreement. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, with almost all sentences following a simple, repetitive pattern. Complex structures are absent. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure proper capitalization of proper nouns, and practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences to convey information more effectively.

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