Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrate export from many EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Overall, the Europe provides goods to China India from a long time year 2000 till 2011 and many other European countries are ion the pie chart.

Firstly, from 2000 a huge number of product export by the United Kingdom to India and in 2011 Belgium is highest in the amount of countries. the lowest countries are Spain, Finland and Sweden in 2000. in 2011 Finland Austria are lowest.

Secondly, European countries exports of goods to China in 2000 highest is Germany and France. in 2011 highest is again Germany and second country is France and third is Italy. There are many more countries like Netherlands which also provides product to India and China but highest number of goods are providing by the Germany in the European Union.

In result there is a data of countries which gives products to India China from years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the pie charts is fragmented and lacks a logical selection of key features. For instance, the mention of 'a huge number of product export' is vague and does not reference specific data points or percentages. The comparison between years is poorly handled, and the overall summary is confusing. To improve, you must identify the most significant trends—such as the dominance of Germany or the shift in market share—and support these with specific figures from the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the phrase 'In result there is a data of countries', which does not function as a logical conclusion. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different countries and years. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'provides goods to China India from a long time year' and 'highest is again Germany'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data effectively. You should focus on learning specific collocations for describing charts, such as 'account for', 'constitute', 'a significant proportion', and 'fluctuate'. Expanding your range to include more precise terminology will help you convey information more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that often impede communication. Basic errors include subject-verb agreement ('The pie chart illustrate', 'Germany and France... highest is'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence construction. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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