Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the Eu countries Exports of Goods to India and China between 2000 and 2011.

Overall, the proportion of Eu Exports of Goods to India and China is increased in 2011, while 2000 experienced a decline. The EU Exports of Goods to China recorded highest figure by the end of the period.

The proportion of Exports of Goods to India from United Kingdom is considerably higher than the others in 2000. And the proportion from Austria considerably lower than the others where is only 1%. The figure rose sharply drop in 2011.And the proportion is only climb from Germany which has 15% to 26%.

The figure of EU Exports of Goods to China is also slightly higher from Germany which has 38% in 2000. And still here the less than from Austria which has only 2%. And the others countries are approximately the same as not the significantly. And the same in 2011 only Germany has climb the proportion which has 48% and the others are still dramatically.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two destinations and make a relevant comparison by noting Germany’s importance in China and the UK’s leading share of exports to India in 2000. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the shares did not generally increase for both destinations, and the charts show country shares rather than total export amounts. You also say Germany’s India share rose to 26%, whereas the chart gives 25%. Several key changes are missed, including the UK’s fall in India from 29% to 13%, Germany’s rise in China from 38% to 48%, and the decline in Belgium’s India share. The response therefore selects some relevant details but reports the main patterns only partially. Give a precise overview and support it with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for India and China. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several sentences are joined in ways that obscure the comparison, such as “And still here the less than from Austria” and “the others are still dramatically.” Repeated openings with “And” and “The proportion” also make the linking mechanical rather than clarifying relationships. Use complete topic sentences, then organise each paragraph around the most important changes, contrasting 2000 with 2011. Clear references such as “By 2011” and “In contrast” would help the reader follow the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “figure,” “higher,” and “decline,” and you attempt to describe change with “rose sharply.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations make the meaning unclear. For example, “the figure rose sharply drop” combines conflicting descriptions, while “the others are still dramatically” does not express a complete or precise idea. “The proportion … is increased” is also an awkward choice for describing chart data. Aim for accurate, conventional phrases such as “accounted for,” “increased to,” “fell from … to …,” and “the remaining countries.” Check spelling and capitalisation of “EU” and “United Kingdom” as well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the response is generally recognisable as a comparison of the charts. However, errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent enough to make several statements difficult to understand. Examples include “the proportion … is increased,” “The figure rose sharply drop,” and “which has 15% to 26%,” where tense, verb construction, or clause structure is faulty. Some sentences are fragments or lack a clear grammatical relationship, such as “And still here the less than from Austria.” Punctuation also needs attention, particularly the missing space after the full stop in “2011.And.” Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, using past-tense forms consistently for the years shown.

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