Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of exports of goods from europe countries to india and china from 2000 to 2011

Overall, the bigest exports country was united kingdom, which was declice over the next years. and the lowest exports rates in Faranca, sweden, spain and netherland so the least was counted was Austria

To commence with, in 2000 the biggest exports was counted 29% in united kingdom, which was gradually decrease in 2011 was at 13% and the belgium was at 25% in 2000 and it also decrease in 2011 stood at 20%. Furthermore germany was started at 15% in 2000. but it increased to 10% in 2011

In contrast, the lowest exports percentage in Austria was at 1% in 2000. and sweden was at 2%, spain at also 2%, which slightly increased in 2011. However the france stood at 8% in 2000 , while it 1% increase, Futhermore the other countries was at 5% in 2000 and it increased 3 % in 2011

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a few relevant features, including the UK’s 29% share of exports to India in 2000 and its fall to 13% in 2011, as well as Belgium’s decline. However, the overview is unclear and contains a major misreading: Germany’s share of exports to India rose from 15% to 25%, not 10%. The statement that the UK was the biggest exporter overall also overlooks Germany’s much larger share of exports to China, which reached 48% in 2011. Several comparisons are vague or inaccurate, and the China charts are largely not described. To improve, give a clear overview comparing the main patterns in both destinations, then select accurate figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening, an overview, and two body paragraphs, with sequencing phrases such as “To commence with” and “In contrast.” This gives the reader a general sense of the response’s structure. However, progression is limited because the paragraphs do not clearly group or compare the India and China data, and the second body paragraph moves between several countries without a consistent organising principle. Connectors such as “Furthermore” and “However” are sometimes used mechanically or do not show a clear relationship between ideas. Improve by grouping information by destination or by major increases and decreases, and use linking phrases only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “exports,” “increased,” and “decrease,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “bigest exports country,” “exports rates,” and “the least was counted.” Spelling errors, including “declice,” “Faranca,” and “Futhermore,” also make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Aim to use standard chart language consistently: describe a country’s “share of exports,” say that it “accounted for” a percentage, and use “rose” or “fell” for changes. Check spelling and avoid repeating “exports” where a more precise phrase is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “which” and “while,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in phrases such as “the biggest exports was counted” and “the other countries was at 5%.” Tense and sentence construction are also faulty in “it also decrease in 2011 stood at 20%,” while several sentences begin with “and” or “but” after a full stop, creating punctuation problems. Articles and prepositions are sometimes missing or awkward. Practise building clear comparison sentences with a subject, accurate past-tense verb, and percentage—for example, “The UK’s share fell from 29% to 13%.”

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