Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the pie chart 1 shows exporting of goods from Europe to india in 2000 the contribution of uk is highest uk export 29 percent and 2 nd number Belgium which also export 25percent whereas france exports 8 percentage and the economical hub of europe export 15percent finland export 2 percent italy export 7 percent netherland exports 4 percent spain export 2 percent sweden also exports 2 percent and other export 4percent.

now coming to exporting from europe to china here most contributor is economical hub of Europe which exports 38percent secondly france exports 13 percent and half of the exportation is done by france and germany. italy contribute 9 percent netherlan contribute 4 percent spain exports 2 percent sweden export 8 percent uk export 9 percent where as austria export 2 percent belgium export 5 percent and finland 6 percent and other country 4 percent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You include several relevant figures for both destinations, such as the UK’s 29% share of exports to India and Germany’s 38% share to China in 2000. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns or compare the two years, so it only partially fulfils the task. Some information is inaccurate: India’s “other” category was 5%, not 4%, and the statement that “half of the exportation is done by france and germany” is incorrect; together they accounted for 51% of China exports in 2000, but the wording is unclear and does not identify the year. The 2011 data are entirely omitted. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Add an overview and select key changes across both years.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first discusses India and then moves to China, signalled by “now coming to exporting from europe to china.” This gives the reader a simple organising framework. However, each destination is presented as a long chain of figures, with little grouping or progression from overview to detail. Connectors such as “whereas” and “secondly” are used, but relationships between the figures are not consistently clear, and there is no paragraph or section devoted to the 2011 comparisons. Separate the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, grouping the most important figures and changes rather than listing every country in sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “contribution,” “exports,” and “percentage,” and the country names and figures are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “most contributor,” “economical hub of Europe,” and “half of the exportation.” Repeated use of “export” and “exports” also makes the account sound like a list rather than a concise data summary. Use standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “share,” and “largest proportion,” and avoid describing Germany as an economic hub when the chart simply reports its export share. More precise collocations would make comparisons clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates many figures through simple clauses, but sentence structures are repetitive and often joined into long, loosely connected strings. For example, “italy contribute 9 percent netherlan contribute 4 percent…” lacks clear sentence boundaries, while “the contribution of uk is highest uk export 29 percent” has problems with articles, agreement, and clause structure. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, making the boundaries between ideas difficult to follow. There is little evidence of controlled complex sentence forms. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate past-tense reporting—for example, “Germany accounted for 38% of exports to China in 2000, while France represented 13%.”

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