Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

EU Exports of Goods to India and China in 2000 and 2011

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the pie chart highlights exports from various EU countries to india and china in 2000 and 2011

in 2000 ships of goods to india Austria 1 %,Belgium 25%,finland 2 %,france 8%,Germany 15 %,italy7 %,Netherlands 4%,spian 2%,swedan 2% highest percentage of united kingdom with 29% and 5% other countries then Eu dispatched of products to china Austria 2%,belgium 5%,finland 6%,france 13%,germany 38%,italy9%,netherlands 4%,spain 2%,sweden 8%,united kingdom 9% and other countries 4%

overall in 2000 united kingdom sell good more than any nation to india and germany ship more things than other countries

in 2011 trade of products to india austria 2% ,Belgium 20%,finland2% ,france 9%,germnany 25%,italy 9%,netherlands 5%,spain 3%,sweden 3%,united kingdom 13% and other 9% only

Eu exports of goods to china Austria 2%,belgium 5%,finland 2%,france 10%,germany 48%,italy8%,netherlands 5%,sweden 3%,united kingdom 7% and other are 8% now in 2000 germany becomes a bigest trader of india and exports to china germany also increased percentage of ships good to china

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures for both destinations in both years, and correctly identify the UK as India’s largest source in 2000 and Germany as China’s largest. However, the response is only 145 words, below the required 150, and the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly summarise the main changes across the period. The statement that Germany “becomes a bigest trader of india” is inaccurate, since Belgium had the largest share of exports to India in 2000, while Germany led in 2011. You also omit Spain’s 2011 share for China. Focus on the dominant patterns—Germany’s growing share in China and India, and the UK’s declining share to India—and check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly chronological order, moving from 2000 to 2011, and the reader can distinguish the two destinations within each year. However, most information is packed into long, list-like sentences, so comparisons and key points are difficult to follow. The opening is not developed into a clear introduction and overview, and “overall” introduces only one observation rather than a summary of the main trends. Paragraphing is limited, while links such as “then” and “now” do not always show the relationship between the data clearly. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and group figures by destination or by the most important changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “exports,” and “increased,” and the country names generally make the data identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent awkward or inaccurate expressions such as “ships of goods,” “sell good,” and “bigest trader.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning unclear, particularly when describing export shares. Spelling errors such as “spian,” “swedan,” and “germnany” also reduce precision. Aim for standard Task 1 collocations such as “accounted for,” “share of exports,” and “recorded the largest proportion.” Check country names and use “goods” or “exports” consistently rather than repeating informal phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report several figures and make comparisons, but it relies mainly on fragments and loosely connected lists rather than controlled sentences. For example, “in 2000 ships of goods to india Austria 1%...” has no clear grammatical structure, while “Germany ship more things” has subject–verb agreement and tense problems. Articles, capitalization, commas, and sentence boundaries are also frequently missing, making relationships between ideas harder to understand. There is little evidence of accurate complex sentence construction. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Germany’s share of exports to China rose from 38% in 2000 to 48% in 2011.” Then proofread agreement, tense, and punctuation.

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