Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The dynamic graph illustrates the previous and current overweight rates and also projected upcomming overweight nine choosen countries.

Overall, graph present the maximum rise in usa between 1970 and 2000. The spain and frace was in steady position, the korea was in the down situation from 2000 to 2020

The Korea was in the lowest position where its value was between 25% from 200 to 2020. The Australia plateaued and rise between 1990 and 2020 with the value odf about 65%. the france was steady between 190 and 1995 but than it goes slightly up from 2000 to 2020.

The Austria was in the mid between these countries and at the value of 45% proportion in 2020. The England was 45% in 1990 and grows up between the years and its value was 69% in the end of 2020. The italy was in the third lower position from 2000 to 2010 at 38% value of overweights.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify some relevant features, including the USA’s high rate, Korea’s low position, and increases in Australia and England. However, the overview is inaccurate: Spain and France do not remain steady overall, and Korea rises from about 25% to 35%, rather than declining. The USA’s largest rise is not confined to 1970–2000; its rate continues upward to a projected 74% in 2020. Several details are also unclear or incorrect, such as Australia “plateaued” and Italy being around 38% in 2010. The response therefore reports only a limited selection of the graph and does not consistently represent its main trends. Focus the overview on the broad upward pattern and the contrast between the highest and lowest countries, then support it with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs, and it moves from a brief introduction to an overview and then to country details. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview contains conflicting claims, and the later paragraphs shift between countries without a clear grouping or comparison. For example, Korea, Australia and France are discussed together, followed by Austria, England and Italy, but the reason for these groupings is not apparent. Linking words are sparse, and some references, such as “its value” and “these countries,” are not always clear. Organise details into meaningful comparisons—for instance, the highest-rising countries and those with lower rates—and use clear transitions to show how each point relates to the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “overweight rates,” “proportion,” “plateaued,” and “projected,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “in the down situation,” “maximum rise,” and “third lower position” are not natural ways to describe graph trends or rankings. There are also spelling errors, including “upcomming,” “choosen,” “frace,” and “odf.” Aim for precise, conventional graph language such as “declined,” “the largest increase,” “remained stable,” and “the third-lowest rate.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations will make your comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “graph present” and “Spain and France was,” while tense and verb forms are faulty in “it goes slightly up” and “the England was … and grows up.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “The Korea was in the lowest position” and “The Austria was in the mid.” Some sentences lack clear grammatical connections, which makes the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise forming accurate past-tense descriptions and use a consistent structure, such as “The rate in France remained stable before rising.” Check agreement, articles and punctuation when editing.

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