Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates overweight rates in several countries.

Overall it evident that project future overweight rate in this nine regions such as united states,canada or more countries.moreover highest overweight rates held in usa or such a lowest outcome in korea in this particular timeline.

First, we have nine countries such usa,canada,england,spain,australia,italy,france or korea, in this regions overweight rates has flactute in yearly, usa has 50% stands in 1970 but its raising very fast 70% overwieght record in 2020.other countries england or canada standing like similar overwieght in 1970s but england have good ratio of future project rate,canada down in starting but grow similar to england.

Other european countries like spain,austria,itlay or france stands in 40% to 50% in 1970 and exact same ratio recorded in this time line no high jumping like united states, australia stands 30% in 1970s but grow extremely well similar to england overweight, finaly korea such a low future project rates record 20% to 30% in this time era, united states top overwieght rate country in this pa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad pattern that rates generally rise and correctly note that the USA is among the highest while Korea remains lowest. However, several key details are inaccurate or unclear: the USA starts at about 45%, not 50%, and Australia begins around 34% in 1990, rather than 30% in the 1970s. The claim that European countries were already at 40–50% in 1970 is unsupported, since most of their data begin later. You also say Canada was lower at the start and then grew similarly to England, but the chart shows both series beginning in the 1990s and ending at different levels. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons would make the report more complete and relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall shape: an opening, an overview, and two paragraphs describing groups of countries. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because countries and time periods are combined without a consistent order. For example, the second paragraph moves from the USA to England and Canada, while the next groups several European countries together despite their different starting dates and trends. Linking words such as “moreover,” “First,” and “finally” are present, but some connections are unclear or mechanical. Organise the report around clear comparisons—such as the highest and lowest rates, then other rising trends—and use references that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “line graph,” “overweight rates,” “highest,” and “future,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “good ratio,” “exact same ratio,” and “no high jumping.” Repetition of “overweight rate” and “country” also limits precision. Spelling errors, including “flactute,” “overwieght,” and “finaly,” further reduce clarity. Aim to use standard trend language accurately, for example “increased steadily,” “rose sharply,” “remained relatively stable,” and “the lowest proportion.” Check spelling and choose terms that describe the data rather than evaluative phrases such as “grow extremely well.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses basic time and comparison structures, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “Overall it evident,” “in this regions overweight rates has,” and “england have,” where sentence structure, agreement, or verb forms are faulty. Articles and plurals are also often missing or incorrect, as in “in this particular timeline” and “nine countries such usa.” Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “while” or “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence endings during revision.

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