Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph show in formation about past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries from1970 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that 50% was highest overweight in USA while 20% was lowest overweight in Korea. In addition, past and future overweight rates increased significantly over the period.

In 1970,50% was overweight in USA. In 2000, 20, was overweight. However, by last years had increased 80% to decreased 20%.

In contrast, 20% overweight started in these countries and then reach 80% in these countries.

In conclusion, overweight rates in past and future countries changed a lot, and 50% highest overweight in USA remained the most popular throuhout the period. In general, this graph line show overall view of overweight in past and future countries. Thus, 1970 to 2020 all countries such as Spain, Austria, France and korea show proportion of overweight.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and attempts an overview, noting that rates increased and that the USA and Korea represent the highest and lowest countries. However, the comparisons are not accurately supported: the USA is not at 50% in 1970 (about 45%), and Korea’s rate is not 20% (about 25% at its first recorded point). Statements such as “by last years had increased 80% to decreased 20%” and “reach 80%” do not match the chart, whose highest projected figure is about 74%. The response also does not report clear, reliable comparisons across the nine countries. It contains 133 words, below the required 150, and 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Select a few accurate trends and support them with approximate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview, body statements and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “In contrast” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the information does not progress in a clear sequence: the body moves from the USA to unclear claims about all countries, without grouping or comparing the data. The contrast introduced by “In contrast” is not explained, and the conclusion largely repeats the overview rather than summarising specific findings. Several references, including “these countries” and “last years,” are unclear. Organise the body around meaningful comparisons—for example, the highest rates versus the lowest—and ensure each linking phrase introduces a clear relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “overweight rates,” “proportion,” “increased,” and “projected future,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “50% was highest overweight,” “20% was lowest overweight,” and “most popular” for a rate. “Changed a lot” is also too vague for describing graph trends, while “show in formation” contains a spelling and word-form problem. These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Use precise terms for proportions and trends, and avoid repeating “overweight” where a clearer phrase such as “the rate” or “the proportion” would work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence patterns, including a contrast sentence beginning “In contrast” and an overview introduced by “Overall.” However, control of basic sentence grammar is inconsistent. For example, “The line graph show” has subject–verb disagreement, and “by last years had increased” lacks a clear subject and a correctly formed clause. The sentence “In 2000, 20, was overweight” is also incomplete or malformed, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent in forms such as “1970,50%.” Most sentences rely on simple structures, with little accurate development of complex forms. Practise complete subject–verb clauses and use a consistent past or projected-time structure when describing changes.

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