Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrates the past and current proportion of the overweight along with projections of future overweight of nine OECD countries.

Overall it can be seen that, rate of over-weight of all countries showed upward trend throughout the whole period,while USA had the highest proportion of over-weight individuals. The least figure was observed for Korea.

In detail,in 1970,USA accounted for the highest proportion of over-weight almost 46% then in 1980 it showed steady upward trend and reached a peak of 75% at the end of the period. In 1980, Spain represented the rate at 42% and it gradually rose and met with Australia canda in 2000 and increased to 54% at the end of the period. This was followed by Austaria in 1980 it was at 39% and experienced constant trend and after some fluctuations reached 46%. Furthermore, in 1980 Australia and France showed almost similar rate 32% and 30% respectively then Australia after cross over Canada ,Spain showed rapid surge of 63%. In 1990 England Italy and Canada represented rapid growth and stood at 60% 45% and 55% respectively. On the other hand, Korea percent in 2000 was almost 25% and will remain lowest throughout the whole period almost 35%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trend and specific data points for the nine countries. However, the report is somewhat cluttered with data, making it difficult to follow the comparisons. While the overview is present, it lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant trends. Some data points are presented in a way that is hard to verify against the graph, and the grouping of countries could be more strategic to highlight the 'main features' rather than listing individual statistics. To improve, focus on grouping countries with similar trajectories rather than detailing every single year and percentage.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'in 1980', 'then'). The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when mentioning 'Australia canda' or 'Australia after cross over Canada'. The logical progression is hindered by the dense listing of figures, which makes the text feel like a list of data points rather than a cohesive analytical report. Improving the use of linking phrases and better paragraph structure would enhance readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There is a reliance on basic descriptors like 'upward trend', 'reached a peak', and 'rapid growth'. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'The least figure was observed' (should be 'The lowest figure') and 'Korea percent' (should be 'The percentage for Korea'). There are also minor spelling and typographical errors, such as 'canda' and 'Austaria'. To reach a higher band, incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plateaued', or 'a marginal increase'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('in 1970, USA accounted for...'), incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors. For example, 'Australia after cross over Canada ,Spain showed rapid surge' is grammatically fragmented and confusing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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