Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given information demonstrate about the overweight rate of 9 countries and the projected future overweight rate in nine countries.

The OECD countries shows various changes in the term of population it is clearly seen that the wide range of increased overweight. The USA population has a sudden decrease in 1980 ,moreover great increased is shown in very year. We can clearly see that the overweight of every individual country get increased.

The overweight of OECD countries, such as USA has very deep information regarding countries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 86 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The summary of the line graph is extremely underdeveloped; it lacks a clear overview of the main trends and fails to provide specific data points or meaningful comparisons between the nine countries. The content is too brief to adequately report the main features of the graph, and the analysis of the USA's trend is inaccurate and lacks supporting evidence from the visual data. To improve, you must provide a comprehensive overview and select key data points to support your descriptions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and do not flow logically. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text feel fragmented. For example, the transition 'moreover great increased is shown in very year' is grammatically incorrect and fails to connect the ideas effectively. The referencing is also unclear, as the text mentions 'the given information' and 'OECD countries' without establishing a clear progression of information. To improve, focus on using transition words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which hinders the clarity of the response. Phrases like 'very deep information' and 'great increased' are imprecise and do not accurately describe the trends shown in a line graph. There is a lack of academic vocabulary related to data interpretation, such as 'fluctuate,' 'upward trend,' or 'projected.' The word choice is often awkward, such as 'in the term of population,' which does not convey the intended meaning. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as verbs for movement and nouns for trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The given information demonstrate', 'The OECD countries shows'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. The sentence 'The USA population has a sudden decrease in 1980 ,moreover great increased is shown in very year' is particularly problematic due to poor punctuation and syntax. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences are often flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation before attempting more complex structures.

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