Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph shows the overweight rates between the years 1970 and 2020 which is a total approximate to 50 years. It show the rate for the following countries: United States of America, England, Canada, Austria, Italy, France, Australia and Korea. The increasing lines show the increase in overweight people over time in certain countries. By far, United States of America has the most increase of overweight people with 80% in 2020 followed by Canada with around 65% and England with 69%. The country with the least number of overweight people is Korea with approximately 35 or 36%. In the perspective of longevity of the rate, the leading country is United States of America since the 1970s followed by Austria since the first 1980s and then Australia since the mid 1980s. In conclusion, this graph show how people are losing discipline and working hard over time as the technology advances rapidly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the highest/lowest rates. However, it fails to address the 'projected future' aspect mentioned in the prompt, focusing only on past data. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinion in the conclusion ('people are losing discipline') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1, which requires an objective summary of data. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed and maintain a neutral, analytical tone throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into a single block of text, which lacks clear paragraphing. While there is a logical progression from general trends to specific country comparisons, the lack of paragraph breaks makes the text feel dense. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'followed by' and 'in conclusion', but the transitions between sentences are sometimes mechanical. To reach a higher band, use clear paragraphing to separate the introduction/overview from the detailed body paragraphs and improve the variety of linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. Phrases like 'most increase of overweight people' are slightly unnatural; 'highest proportion' or 'steepest rise' would be more accurate. There is also some repetition of basic terms like 'increase' and 'overweight'. The attempt to use 'longevity' is slightly misused in this context, as it refers to lifespan rather than the duration of a trend. Focus on using more precise collocations related to data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'It show the rate' should be 'It shows the rate', and 'a total approximate to 50 years' is awkward phrasing. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'in the perspective of longevity'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for basic agreement and tense consistency.

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