Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph below past and current overweight rates is project in future.the nine selected countries are his overweight description in this graph.
Overall,this line Graph illustrat about Countries past and present overweight rates.the line graph will be show about many countries future overweight description in the future years.
The line graph is illustrates about nine countries overweight rates growth.How many countries are more increase overweight rates in future investment.The USA countries overweight rates will be highly grow up in present time and future also.The Korea nations overweight rates will be stable in the present and future years.
The graph will show some investment related strategy.how many countries are more investment in past and this results are held in being into future.The Australia and England Nations are invest your overweight rates in past very big money investment but us decision is very sharply growth in future.The Austria and Canada Nations are invest your overweight rates some part of investment and us investment is slightly better than past comparatively in future.The Spain and Italy countries are rates will show some up and down strategy and slightly better then.The France nations investment is slightly better than better in year by year end more bete in future years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to accurately interpret the graph. You have misinterpreted the data entirely, describing the trends as 'investment' and 'money' rather than 'overweight rates'. This indicates a fundamental misunderstanding of the task prompt. While you mention several countries, the lack of accurate data reporting means the main features are not identified or compared correctly. To improve, you must focus on the actual labels of the graph (overweight percentages) rather than inventing a narrative about financial investment. The response is largely off-topic due to this misinterpretation, which significantly impacts the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect (e.g., 'The USA countries overweight rates will be highly grow up'). There is a lack of clear referencing, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt or confusing. The overall structure is present, but the internal flow is hindered by the lack of clarity in the content, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. You frequently use the word 'investment' to describe health statistics, which is inappropriate and inaccurate. There is also a lack of variety in your word choice, with repetitive phrasing such as 'overweight rates' and 'in future'. You struggle to use precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'highly grow up' instead of 'projected to increase significantly'). To reach a higher band, you need to learn specific vocabulary for describing data, such as 'fluctuate', 'stable', 'upward trend', and 'projected'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order (e.g., 'The line graph below past and current overweight rates is project in future'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are consistently marred by errors. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that tense usage is consistent.
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