Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.
Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the past, current and project future overweight rates in nine selected countries.
Overall, the Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries. In USA proportion rose a dramatically, while in Europe countries experienced a slight decrease than USA over the period. Italy, France and Korea showed a fluctuated.
In 1970, USA made up a decline and rose significantly throughout the period, European countries showed a fluctuated approximately 50% to 70%. In 1980, Spain constituted a slight fall in 2000 and climb in 2020. In contract Austria showed stable between 1980 and 1990 and little fluctuated and showed a climb approximately at 43%. USA recorded a minimal fall and peak at above 73%, whereas Korea recorded least proportion in overweight all of the countries.
Australia experienced an increased about 64% in 2020, while Italy and France accounted for about 40% in 2020. In 2000, Korea constituted of 30% in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the graph, but the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the description of trends in the USA and European countries is vague and does not clearly reflect the data provided. Several statements are contradictory or factually incorrect based on the graph, such as the claim that Korea showed a 'fluctuated' trend or the confusing description of the USA's trajectory. The overview is also poorly constructed, merely repeating the title rather than highlighting the key trends. To improve, focus on identifying clear peaks, troughs, and overall growth patterns rather than listing individual data points without context.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often illogical. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as 'In contract' (likely meant 'In contrast') and 'In 2000, Korea constituted of 30% in 2020'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The lack of logical flow between sentences hinders the overall coherence of the report. Using a wider range of linking words correctly and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly improve the structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used inaccurately. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'made up a decline', 'showed a fluctuated', and 'constituted of'. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the intended meaning is sometimes obscured by the incorrect usage of verbs and nouns. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'experienced a significant increase' instead of 'rose a dramatically', and ensure that you are using the correct parts of speech.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'USA made up a decline', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'In USA proportion rose a dramatically'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will help increase your accuracy.
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