Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the information about the excessive weights rates from the past, now in present and estimated for the future in some selected countries.

Overall, there are nine different nations, from where the overweight rates is taken. At the very beginning the overweight rates was recorded by the USA and it is estimated to be in the top for the future too. While, Korea was at the lower point for all past, present and future.

In 1970, the overweight rate was only recorded in USA and was just under the half of overall weights. However, after a decade it slightly decreased and reached just above 40%. After that, it gradually rose and is is estimated to reach almost three quarter by the end of the year 2020. Whereas, it was recorded to be just under the 40% from both Austria and Italy after the year 1980. It fluctuated over the period and projected to reach just under the 50%.

Following that trend, from France and Korea, it was set up from almost below the on third proportion after the year 1980 and it is projected to grow reach just above 40% just up the one third respectively from both countries by the end of 2020. Meanwhile, it was approximately 32% from Australia between 1980 to 1990 it soared and surpass all the nation except England and USA. Likewise, in England and Spain, it was Just below the 50% and and just above the 40% respectively between 1980 and 1990. It is estimated to skyrocket and reach almost 70% in 2020 and from Spain it is also estimated to rise and reach almost 55% after surpassing Canada in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and made relevant comparisons between the countries. You covered the past, present, and future projections as required. However, the report suffers from some inaccuracies in data interpretation; for instance, describing the USA rate as 'just under the half of overall weights' is unclear, and some of your specific data points are imprecise. To reach a higher band, ensure that your descriptions of the data are more accurate and that you clearly distinguish between the different time periods for each country. While the overview is present, it could be more concise to better highlight the most significant trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the logical progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile' and 'Following that trend', the flow is occasionally mechanical. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the countries and the specific percentages becomes difficult to track. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly relates to the previous one will enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'soared', and 'skyrocket'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'excessive weights rates' instead of 'overweight rates' and 'set up from almost below the on third proportion'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly opaque. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting and ensure that your word choices are natural and contextually appropriate. Expanding your range of synonyms for describing growth and decline will also help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'overweight rates is taken'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'it is is estimated'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and unnecessary repetition of words. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical errors and ensuring subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your clarity and accuracy.

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