Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE BELOW LINE GRAPH DEPICTS THE OBESITY PERCENTAGE RATES ALSO SHOWING FUTURE PROPORTION OF OBESITY IN NINE DIFFRENT COUNTRIES.

OVERALL, IT IS SHOWS THAT THE LESS OBESITY PERCENTAGE SHOWS IN KOREA BEFORE 2000 BUT AS TIME INCREASE ITS OVERWEIGHT INCREASE UPTO 35 PERCENT. IN THE OTHER SIDE THE USA HAVE MOST INCREASING NUMBERS IN OVERWEIGHT IN FUTURE.

FIRSTLY, IN 1970 THE USA HAS LOW PROPORTION OF OVERWEIGHT BUT IN FUTURE PROJECT SHOWS THAR IT ICREASED FROM 45 PERCENNT TO 75 PERCENT. MOREOVER, AUSTRIA HAS APPROXIMATE 40 PERCENT OVERWEIGHT IN 1990 IN 2020 IT GOING UPTO 45 PERCENT AND ITALY HAS ALSO SAME RATE IN OVERWEIGING IN 2020.

IN BETWEEN 1980 AND 1990 SPAIN HAS 43 PERCENT OVERWEIGHT BUT IT GRADUALLY INCREASE DURING THE TIME AND REACHES UPTO 55 PERCENT. MOREOVER, AUSTRAILIA INCRERASES HIS OVERWEIGHT UPTO 65 PERCENT IN FUTURE AND FRANCE HAS LESS NUMBER OF INCREASED OF OVERWEIGHT IN FUTURE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by identifying some trends, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the main features. The data interpretation is inconsistent; for example, the claim that the USA had a 'low proportion' in 1970 is not supported by the graph, and the figures cited for countries like Austria and Italy are imprecise. The response lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, such as the general upward trajectory across all countries. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and the lack of accurate data reporting prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'moreover' and 'in future'. The referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the overall structure lacks the sophisticated flow required for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'increase', 'overweight', and 'proportion' are used frequently without variation. There are several spelling errors, such as 'diffrent', 'thar', 'icreased', 'percennt', and 'austrailia'. Furthermore, the word choice is often imprecise, such as 'most increasing numbers' or 'same rate in overweighing'. To improve, you should focus on using a wider variety of synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('it is shows', 'USA have'), tense usage ('it going upto'), and sentence structure. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in basic syntax. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors across basic and complex structures prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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