Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph below shows past and current overweight rates, as well as a projected future overweight rate in nine selected countries.

Summarise the infonnation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Past and projected future overweight rates in selected OECD countries

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the current and past overweight rates in nine selected countries from 1970 to 2020.

Overall, the highest proportion is USA and the lowest is Korea.

Firstly, USA started from almost 45% then it grew up to 74% between 1970 to 2020. Moreover, Korea started in at 1990 to 25% then it increase to 35%. Furthermore, France started in 1980 to 30% and go to around about 44% and Italy in 1990 period to 39% to 43% in 2020.

In contrast, Australia 33% to 64% overweight proportion from 1980 to 2020. What's more Austria is near to little 40% then increased to 45% in 2020. Although, Spain start up from 42% then go to 52% and Canada is start from 49% to then go up to about 53%.On the other hand, England is start from 47% to 70% in 2020. That's the overall data

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features and provided some data points, the analysis is superficial. You have listed figures for each country without effectively grouping them or highlighting significant trends, such as the overall upward trajectory across all nations. The summary lacks a clear overview of the projected future rates mentioned in the prompt, focusing almost exclusively on past data. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends and reach the required word count to fully develop your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. You rely on a list-like structure, moving from one country to the next without clear thematic grouping. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In contrast', they are often used mechanically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. To improve, try to group countries with similar trends together (e.g., those with the highest growth versus those with more stable rates) and use more sophisticated linking phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'started', 'increased', and 'go to'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'go to around about' and 'start up from'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'soared', 'remained stable', 'fluctuated', or 'a significant rise'. Avoid informal phrasing like 'go to' and focus on using more precise academic terminology to describe the data points and the changes over time.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with verb tenses ('Korea started in at 1990 to 25% then it increase'), preposition usage ('started in 1980 to 30%'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. You should focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, ensuring that subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are maintained throughout. Proofreading for basic errors like 'is start from' instead of 'started at' would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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